The same rules apply

-OnE

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Aiight look

Sickly beginning... on top, Im stricty for winning]
Punches'll make you do 360s, look at the way this prick'll be spinning]
'Zeus'? Come on, You don't think you're a 'lightning God']
Bitch I'm 'shocking'... Think of my punches as some 'lightning rods']
You're fightin' odds...because the probability is most likely that you won't win this]
You could be in 'toilet competitions' and you still could'nt 'win shit']
As soon as my pin hits then the skin splits]
After this battle you're gonna find out, that for rappin' you've never been fit]
Yeah you prolly can rhyme, but you winnin' is a boost gig]
Fuck a pen... words are comin' 'off the top' like 'loose wigs']
Disregard a truce kid... I'm the spittin' depiction of a hell's statue]
You gettin' hit with alphabet blocks...In other words I'm throwing L's At you]
You's a small brawl, dawg I done slammed vets]
He's scared to scuffle....'Hesitating' to 'BANG' like 'jammed techs']
Man I'm done doing damage... I'ma stop I won't say more]




Ohh.......You could'nt elevate if I left you sitting on claymores]

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Ay uppin 4 his drop



-OnE

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- Challenging me was the first mistake-
- with my rhymes ill snap your neck in one lil break-
-Your name is whack cant you see-
-your an extreme exaggeration of the truth, just like THE OC-
-You rhymes similar to paint, bitch your easily peeled-
-dont make your mom faint when her only son gets killed-
-i'll shoot you in your ride, leave ya slumped on the steering wheel-
-and you better fear,cuz that bulge right there is steel-
-A.K will spray your fucking crib up then i'll mail you the bill-
-you know the saying, those who fail to hear will feel-
-but you wont be asleep when I leave you peaceful and still-
-i'll murder your offspring so put your bitch on the pill-
-you motherfuckers playing games?then Zeus is the deal-

That was some tight shit hyperbole, the whole toilet bowl thing had me laughing, I posted on the other one first, so I just copied that and put it on here.

Zeus:

Dawg your first was kinda simple guy. Your lines didnt catch me off guard they were aight.

- Challenging me was the first mistake-
- with my rhymes ill snap your neck in one lil break-
Man I mean you gotta say off the wall shit. Thats something a rookie that first started rappin would not a rookie on this site. No multiz. Besides I ahvent heard a tight West nigga in along time.

Hyberbole:
You had some pretty nice shit I thought.

Yeah you prolly can rhyme, but you winnin' is a boost gig]
Fuck a pen... words are comin' 'off the top' like 'loose wigs']
Disregard a truce kid... I'm the spittin' depiction of a hell's statue]
You gettin' hit with alphabet blocks...In other words I'm throwing L's At you]
You's a small brawl, dawg I done slammed vets]
He's scared to scuffle....'Hesitating' to 'BANG' like 'jammed techs']

Those lines in my opinion were ill as fuck. The word play was nice. No presonals thought but overall you took....

V/ Hyberbole

dis was a week battle...
Zeus...punches came week......flow needs attension.....structure was ok but could still b a lot beat.....wordplay was ok tho......personals came week....overalll...4/10
HyperBole....some nice punches but some week....flow was aiight......structure was ellemntry.....personals were ok but could av bin a lot beta....wrdplay was nice...overall......6/10
v/HyperBole
Keep it up both of you!!!!!
aaaiiggghhtt!!!!!!

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hmm nice battle cant say much about rapin but it was kool

Thanks for the feedback

Now uppin 4 votes

-OnE

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Ay it would be nice to give some feed back


_OnE

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Hyperbole, your shit was pretty tight. You started out a little shakey but you made up for it by the end. You killed it.

Zeus, Your rhymes were too elementary. Your thoughts were in the right place but you just gotta be more creative.

Vote: Hyperbole