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Old 04-12-04, 01:24 PM   #1
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check it y'all!!!!!!!

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wrote this while i was blazed about this chick i'm crazy about


i glanced at this chick in my class for the first time/
new right away she was down to be my "partner in crime"/
talked to her and was swept away with her voice/
knew she'd be my #1 draft choice/
this girls got me thinking crazy, thinkin i'm in heaven/
probably knows that my favorite numbers seven/
probably knows me front to back already/
but this ones it, so i gotta go steady/
gotta take it slow, cuz this girl aint a booty call hoe/
she's got me floatin on clouds, thinkin i'm on love reality shows/
is this for real the way i'm feelin, or is it the weed overtakin my mind/
whateva it is it feels so great to be with you, gotta replay days wit you and rewind/
got me writin a wannabe love song, on the net/
cuz ya got me smokin a marijuana cigarette/
damn girl i wish i could tell you, you make me feel this way/
but i don't wanna delay, wanna be givin ya gifts on valentines day/
don't think i'm crazy the way i write about you/
cuz THIS IS what i want, somethin i gotta pursue/
I got preset memories thinkin of you and I/
I see you sittin and talkin wit friends sayin "this is my guy"/
see u sittin by the fire wit massages of my hands so gentle/
cuz u know my tender touch is sentimental/
ridin in carriages downtown cuddled and huddled in blankets/
or travelin european destinations across the atlantic/
girl i can't stop wit the photos of what could happen/
gotta know if u wanna sit down and make it happen/
tell me what u want, what ya need/
and i'll be there to grant it wit exceed/
i'll grab the stars and moons for u to look at/
even if they wanna combat, i'll battle for u/
just so i can look at you one more day, one more second/
be there for you when ya need protection/
damn girl this feelin is such a natural selection/
want to know if ya feel the same/
wanna know if u wanna play this game/
i hope the answers yes/
gotta tell u in a way of finesse/
cuz ya deserve to be treated fine, gotta be takin to wine and dine/
got me spittin the way i feel defined, i hope our feelings combine/
hope i aint dreamin by myself/
hope she aint hopin do be wit herself/
gotta team up on this chance/
can't be dreamin about my first glance/
gotta make this for real, gotta make it reality/
or else my dreams will just be another fatality/
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Old 04-12-04, 02:48 PM   #2
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It was straight...good write
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Old 04-12-04, 09:23 PM   #3
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uuppiin for feedback, please drop an opinion while ya in here!!!!!!!
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Old 04-14-04, 10:50 PM   #4
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Ok, This was more of an open mic. But a straight subject. Simple vocab, good thought though. Nice.
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Old 04-17-04, 01:06 PM   #5
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I dont feel that it was anything real special, it was nice none the less tho..i can see this being spoken in open mic...
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