Alright boy, basic rulez
10-15 Lines
Checkin and i'll spit 1st

ight checkity check my nigga........................Let the best man win

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Aight here we go...

This kid came to battle but forgott his ammo, how's he supposed-to-win?...
All he could do is 'throw punches' but he'll 'fall shorter' than 'Mexicans'...
Didn't they tell u boy, i'm the 'clumsy' type and i might 'spill-ya-guts'...
Be cautious cuz i got slugs that'll fill-ya-cup and kill-u-chumps...
Look man, my flows will eat you n 'spit bars' out of ur rib 'cage'...
I ain't 'Carey' but iz like i got a 'fever' that'll fill this page wit 'rage'...
You get 'dissed on screens' like u was a contestant on 'American Idol'...
You wack, pasting a book cover on ur shirt is the only time u'd 'wear a title'...
I'm quick wit the heat, but u still 'slow to load' like 'dial-up modems'...
The only 'four-five' u eva owned was a '98 pro-cut Jordan'...
G Deuce? boy 'i'll smoke you like a goose' when i 'abort-ya-brains'...
Then get on sum 'Captain Planet' shyt when i 'absorb-ya-name'!!!

ill vote when the battles finished but until then drop some votez on my battles...

battles below... peace

I'll spit soon as I get home. It be bout 8:00 cause i got practice. Good spit.

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Grim

I travel through time to murk niggas and master rhymes. Lyrically balance, and any challenge I conquered wit lines. I’ll stop and chop your thoughts, exhaling any rhyme or lyrical preference till you mind turns pail. Impale this true incompetent one with words of “HOLY” cause I drunk it all and you only took a sip of the “GRAIL”. Zeet can speak rhymes, but he’ll never speak lines (think about it), his arms too short to box wit God or even reach mine. My words will shut this hoe’s mouth, and take him out of misery
And have him seeing nothing but dark like “BLACK HISTORY”. Viciously, I’m a tear your rhymes like bullet through glass, and murk this nigga like “Forest Gump” wit “bullet in ass.” Freedom at last, won’t be none cause this nigga just got his heart hurt. I’ll splatter his rhymes on walls and call it artwork.

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uppin for votes.........................................uppi n

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Vocab- G
Flow - Zeet
Punches - G
Creativity - g by a lil' bit

G was very impressive. The only thing I didn't really like was havin' to read through that whole shit like a paragraph, but everything else was madd on-point. These lines was the highlites.

My words will shut this hoe’s mouth, and take him out of misery
And have him seeing nothing but dark like “BLACK HISTORY”.

Freedom at last, won’t be none cause this nigga just got his heart hurt.
I’ll splatter his rhymes on walls and call it artwork.

That was sick.

Zeet was madd tight too. A couple of them was a stretch to rhyme though man. Just work on that a lil' more, the approximate rhyme is sometin' that works more in an audio battle, but not in text where you can't make it rhyme through inflection. You was pretty good though fam. G just got ova on you a lil' more than you did him. That's how it's goin' down.

Vote: G: Deuce

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Zeet man you rhymes were tight man.....................uppin for votes

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Grim

I liked G's vocab and his punches were tight, Zeet's also flowed well and had some good punches. I liked Zeets flow better.. but in the end G's punches won it. I loved the Black History line man.. good battle.. step up on the punches next time Zeets and you will be ill'. V - G

http://community.rapbattles.com/sho...03&page=4&pp=15 vote for me there.. only need one more vote.. thx

aiight....G;duce battle peeps who aint fuckin' newbs dawg.....ur killin' everyn newb...anyways.....simple this battle.....very 1 sided.....duce punch hit harder...other cat was kinda week alround...good battle tho

v/duce

Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. - strobe

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He challenged me, and you know I dont turn down challenges..........uppin for votes

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Grim

good battle i was digging both verses both had a good flow and good structre g duece came strong so did zeet
punches-g deuce 7/10 zeet 6/10
wordplay-gdeuce 6/10 zeet 6/10
flow- gdeuce 8/10 zeet 8/10
structure gduece 8/10 zeet 8/10
vote-g-duece got into his verse jus a lil bit more than zeet good battle fellaz

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Aight Check It...

G-Duece: 6/10
I Liked The Wordplay You Used In This Battle. Nice Flow, Structure Could've Been Better. Decent Punches and Metaphors. Mulits Still Need Work.

Zeet: 4/10
I Didn't LIke Your Flow Too Much, Stretched Out Bars, Um...Word Usuage Would've Helped You Out. Multis and Metaphors You Need To Work On. Punches Were There But Not Hot. Just Elevate.

Vote - G-Duece

~R~