you yo spit first, whatever length, i'll get mine up as fast as i can

no hate votes, no dick riding, crew shit, whatever... course we both newbs so that shouldn't matter

aight rules is... gotta post soon by today or tomorrow.. and the other thing. we shoudl put a limit to the amount of lines cuz im the type to write 60 to 70 lines for no apparent reason ...jsut becuz so imma set this at just 20 lines max.

aight, if you post now i can get it in tonight, just keystyle something

ok, whatever, my shit is ready, so i'll drop it now and you can whenever

Truth be told, I knew I had yo
With the first step you took into da shadow
Now what does v see, it’s me, s e, master mc
Playa slaya and rap grandmaster
Your stock drop fast but I collapse ya faster
soon yo face’ll be public – missing child poster
I rip out the crippled spine of a whack boaster
8 years from now your body still aching
n hand still shaking, body still quaking
try to pen a rap, cant hold the pen steady
you need more practice, cuz you sure ain’t ready
for your crime of battle’n me, face the jury
then the executioners – my twin fists of fury
execute the court ruling – palm to the chest
already you spasm like you demon possessed
now the second hit n’ you down and out
one verse KO, that’s what this rhyme’s about

good luck shadow... may the best man win....

rightfully,i claim this battle mine/
cuz ill smoke this nigga as if my mouth was the end of a nine/
ill reenact the holocaust fuck the geneva convention/
induce fear into you nigga u coward scoured when my name get mentioned/

style two
*metaphorically*,ill get into ya skin *sporatically*,have you outdated that i couldnt c-14 your ass *historically*/
renaissance, im *radically* replacing you with demoes *statically*,like WW1,ill conquer that ass *stragetically*/
*nonheterosexual*,*treck* *specials*,u rhyming like dr.j play dog,all ya shit is *retro*/
i hope u got *gecko* cuz imma get u **accidents**,and cause problems like drew *bledsoe* i coudla told you nigga,that you lost from the *get~go*
style three
shadow,have him sliced up concealed in glad~bowls/
u not seeing me,like i was hollow an and you was double blind~fold/
cant up your levels for greatness, if you aint striving/
u beating me is unbelievable,like tabloids saying they saw stevie wonder driving/

style four
i aint done i gotta lot more,wake forest bitch!,u just oregon state,couldnt reach the final four/
wins for you ,the equivalent to none,i know i gotta record lyrically cuz this battle i just won/
i aint even ejecting my mad semen,swimmin on your ass like they was first mate marine sea~men/
dont worry theres a place for you always on my lsit on victims,this is why you dont battle jsut anybody(somebody get this nigga)b4 i restrict em'/

style five/finisher

COMMENCEMENT,i have an ANNOUCEMENT! view it one line BELOW,imma contestant you'll want to FORGO/
IMMINENT DEFEAT,INTIMATE SECRETES,definitely sickness at the end of the WEEK/(the period)

fuck it ill do these last to line as a filler/
what dsoe this know about being a fulll-blown killer?/

im done.

lol interesting definition of 20 lines let's vote on this one people, don't sleep on it, even though y'all probably sleeping by now

^actually he has thirty lines not including that hugh ass stretched line. 15 barz is what I count, but seeing has there is no limit let's vote

Punchs - VC
Personals - VC
flow/structure - Shadow (VC's was all ova the place)
Creativity - VC
Multi's - VC
Metah's - VC

Shadow- good rhyme structure. You lacked alot of hard hitting punchs, and personals VC just over powered u. U got a good flow now get more creative look at ur lines, and think harder on how u can flip em to be wayyy more effective

Fav line.
execute the court ruling – palm to the chest
already you spasm like you demon possessed

^nice wordplay

VC - had the better punchs personals, and wordplay structure was off, and I lost the flow at times. Try not to stretch ur lines so much delete uneeded words, or reword ur sentences.

Fav line:
cant up your levels for greatness, if you aint striving/
u beating me is unbelievable,like tabloids saying they saw stevie wonder driving/

^^^haha very creative dawg I liked it

my vote - VC

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lol.. there's a 20 line limit, but whatever... good battle i think.

lol... also notice you gave vc the multi's whatever... just cuz he puts a * * doesn't mean the words rhyme.

Check VC's Lines

*metaphorically*,ill get into ya skin *sporatically*,have you outdated that i couldnt c-14 your ass *historically*/
renaissance, im *radically* replacing you with demoes *statically*,like WW1,ill conquer that ass *stragetically*/

^^Tight WordPlay.. & Vocab & Also Multies' ... Tight Tight

Check These Lines ... On Punches

shadow,have him sliced up concealed in glad~bowls/
u not seeing me,like i was hollow an and you was double blind~fold/
cant up your levels for greatness, if you aint striving/
u beating me is unbelievable,like tabloids saying they saw stevie wonder driving/

Over All I Enjoyed Your Verse But... You Need To FixXx & Work On Your Structure' Because Shit Is Hard To Follow

Shadows edge Your Shit Was A Bit Basic.. But I Give You The "Flow & Structure" Shit Was Easy To Follow OVer All Nice.... Verse

Vote: VC

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shadow i think this was a bit unfair cuz you only wrote a couple of lines
he wrote a fucking book five style + an outro how could u expect to win this
ok ur verses structure was good but too much boasting and too little punches
fantastic ending i dig that shit 3/10

vc u won, hell who would of guessed u wrote a crap load of lines
isnt it obvious, u had to have gotton more punches but all and all
u had better punches wait u had punches, oh ya 5 styles no offence their
all the same, 6/10

vote vc