hook: fuck da r.i.p./and eveyone up in it/shut ya'll mouths/and listen up/
im tired of ya'll stupid fools/say what you say i still dont give a fuck

now listen up all ya'll got sumtin to say
there's bout to be a fight so get outta my way

g-duce you the learder but you dont make hits
you may be good but you still aint shit

you dont hit me back when ever i want
my shit is hot but you dont put in a thaught

i said fuck the rip did that make you mad
put a hole in ya heart and make you sad

baker boy are ya here you betta listen
you missed the target like gettin horny while pissin

now probely your thinkin whats up wit this kid
merkin us not knowin what we did

but it's kinda simple if you think about it
you could'nt even said no ya had to stingy about it

could'nt reply eveytime i post
you got me there sittin gatherin hopes

but baker boy i just used you as a steppin stone
and look where im at sittin on the open mic throne

your okay i aint that hard on you
just that your whole crew sucks the leader just like you

if i was in your shoes i woulda left mounths ago
now you gotta compeat wit others just to keep your spot so flow

flow bitch flow like never before
o wait you never had a good flow since the age of four

and that was when you read a dr. suess book and added a beat
you had the whole kindergarden class up on there feet

g-duce dont go i aint done wit you yet
ya whole crews dogs now they really need a vet(eran)

hahaaaaa so if anyone got another part they would like to in about hatin da r.i.p please just post it and i'll laugh just like now

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not bad diss...
not hard enough imo..
need 2 make ya shit more complex..
keep droppin n elevate son
peace

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yea like he said elevate work on vocab and mutis
who the fuck is rip????????

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i liked it holla..........


one love........

wonnnnnttt feelin it dissing my homie g-duece

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and i'm suppose to care how... please inform me i would love to know

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Nice diss I'm new to this board who is R.I.P.?

fav lines:

baker boy are ya here you betta listen
you missed the target like gettin horny while pissin


^^^good average punch 1st line was ghey tho second was strong.

g-duce dont go i aint done wit you yet
ya whole crews dogs now they really need a vet(eran)

^^^strong finisher I liked it

IMO worst lines:

and that was when you read a dr. suess book and added a beat
you had the whole kindergarden class up on there feet

^so what u saying is he was ill when he was 4 years old, but now he's shit I think those 4 lines are shit IMO

your okay i aint that hard on you
just that your whole crew sucks the leader just like you

^was that supposed to be hard iunno.

ok this diss (if you can call it that) really lacked creativity, and complexity. Ur punchs where soft at best, and at timez u seemed to big them up .
Thats the worst thing u could do in a diss is big somebody up, and another thing I I I I I Me Me Me u gotta stop with this I, and me shit man no1 wants to hear some1 diss some1, and they talk about themselfs. The object of a battle is to unleash an all out attack on some1. think back to when em beat pop doc (yah it's only an example, and I know it was all writen), but you see how he just kept attacking and attacking u had the idea, just ur punchs weren't very complex nor affective. Also wtf where you're personals? I did not see 1 in that, and a personal is wayyyyyyyyy better then a punch any day.

This piece lacked complexity in punches. It had no personals, and wasn't overly creative all in all I would give this a 3/10 and the only reason you would get a 3 is because of those 2 decent punchs, and ur flow structure was nice. U might ask urself why ur piece wasn't that good well omg look at ur fucking word usage man a kindergartner could have wrote that shit lol. Next time dig up some dirt on opponents before dropping something against them it should give u more to work with. What I did like about this piece was the flow structure, and it didn't seem forced u got ur point across that they're assholes, and they treated u like shit

No hate just feedback keep elevatin read a book, and learn some new words.

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