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04-26-04, 12:49 PM
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The Devil's Daughter
IP: 6DCA 81D9
Wallowing in self-sorrow... Trying to forget today and live tomorrow... Outsider to my own mind... It's like my time is borrwed... Completely random meeting... Another girl claims she feels me... Did she care geniunely or was this another case of pity... Then it hits me... Depression comes from a heart thats empty... Its tempting... Maybe for once a relationship will be fufilling... Everything's going well... depression is suppressing.... Stoicism fading while love keeps progressing... Problems at home abound... Pain comes in throngs... But somehow its theraputic... Finally have a shoulder to cry on Erased my hurt... And placed my in a positve house hold... God damn I love this girl... let the truth be told... Months pass... Everything on the surface is great... But the subconcious begins to inkle of hate... Issues of jealousy and trust begin to show their face.... Seems like no matter where I go... I corrupt that place... Issues grow constantly... From jealousy to rumors of infidelity... I thought this was perfection... How can all this be?... The end draws near and I find peace again.... Think atleast out of this I've gained a friend... Realtionship turns malicious... how the fuck can she do this? Goes from friend to friend... That hurtful fucking bitch!!! Luck runs out for her... She finally comes back to me... And for some reason I take her back... Giving into lunacy... Pain still remains... but I stay the same... I'm now a sado-massacist... Constantly wondering how love can hurt and fufill like this... Finally scrap it... Tired of the emotional slaughter... It seems I've fallen literally... for the Devil's Daughter...
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04-26-04, 04:55 PM
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IP: 75F5 BDD1
Hmm.. certainly not as good as your other drop, in my opinion. Again, it flows like a poem, but lacks any poetic imagery or metaphor. And whereas in your last drop, the emotion felt real and vivid, here I'm just not feeling the flow. It just seems so cliche.. and you didn't really add much to it. Not saying it's bad, I'm just not really feeling it.
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04-26-04, 07:39 PM
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IP: 06D4 9403
Understand it fully. Seems like part of my life, hah but anyways. Loved vocabulary and the use of words. I was actually writing a song similar to this for my band. Weird. But i dont think this needed imagery, though it would have put a great edge on it. The emotion was enought o make uip for it. Good drop.
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