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Old 04-20-04, 05:33 PM   #1
yOuNG tIPS
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Im New Id Like FeedBack Holla....1

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How you gonna talk when you really a herb....
the only time you in the streets is when your face is in the curbs....
My squad fucks with big guns let em all spray....
shots rickashaying off walls threw project hallways....
on the block chin up,eyes open pumpin jumps....
talking like you really from the slums....
knock your teeth out you mouth so you can really start bumping your gums...
cuz all you do is act hard and talk shit, thats all your about....
when your a trick you stay rocking a thong and blouse...
By any means im dirty never lose im only out to win....
SLICE you up like BIRDY did to the BUM FLIP in ABOVE THE RIM....
i got that fuel for D for cheap wanna make a bet....
I pump madd DIESEL and i talking about the clotheing that Domicans sweat...
No need for deals just get your money correct...
no need to holla some where else, "Im the Perfect Connect"
nothing in this world is for FREE you gotta make what you feel you diserve... my FIENDS is like VOLLEY BALLS they stay getting SERVED"....
fuck with my paper gats is locked and loaded ready to attack...
send shots at your chest and let em exit your back...
so dont eben try to holla at the boy its a COLD WORLD i keep HEAT and i aint talking COTOROIDS....
shots....where your neck be nigga...slugs the size of Hockey Pucks call me Gretzky nigga....
or if i cant find you on the low ill hawk your bitch...
Im trying to be a KING like STOYAKOVITCH....
talk that Gangstah ill run up on you and shank you....
snatch your chain off your neck wink at you and say thank you....
so dont sleep im on that late night creep packing the heat...
leave your brains on your bitches lap in the passanger...
Nigga you either bark or bite....talk or fight....
face to face i can see that your the talkative type.....
im out here for Heavy Doe yall working Minimum wage....
i rob cats and im "GONE IN 60 SECONDS" like NICHOLAS CAGE....
fuck getting clapt at ill give you a round of applause....
if your moveing in fast foward ill put you life on pause....
no type of cat gonna catch me while there creeping...
im wide awake like a fiend so im never sleeping......
im 19 feels like im saying whats the deal to 25....
im surprised that im even here to do this and say im alive...
this for my niggas thats on the block Ds roll up start hopping fenses...
this is the city of Boston where fiends fight over park Benches....
guess what home boy this shit as just started to go down...
ILL THROW BULLETS AT YOU LIKE TOM BRADY TO TROY BROWN....Holla
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Old 04-20-04, 05:43 PM   #2
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That shit how

If you interested I'm starting a crew called Misunderstood were we gone try to take over the web site

If you down go to crews and scroll down to misunderstood tryouts and drop 8 brs and I'll holla at you
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Old 04-20-04, 05:45 PM   #3
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LyriKal DestruKtion Is Taking Over This SHIT!!!!!!!!!!!!! Lmfao' .. Nah Only Messing
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Old 04-23-04, 02:22 PM   #4
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yo im saying let me get some more feed back and i wanna see whats good with joing a crew holla at chur boy fellas......1
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Old 04-23-04, 03:45 PM   #5
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yo overall i'd give this verse a 8/10 it had its strong and weak points juss like any other verse but i liked the KINGS/STOYAKAVICH line and the GONE IN 60 SECONDS. You need to work on putting commas on ur writings tho (hard to read) and try not to have so many simple rhymes in there. Stay Up Son...

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why do it// knowin u can light my saliva like lighta fluid//-Royce da 5'9''
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Old 04-23-04, 07:39 PM   #6
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good look on the feed back....id like to see more holla at me MCs i know i got something in me.......1
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dont confuse me with these cornballs on the radio//


ima true hustlah you couldnt fit in my shoes//
my pager buzz to much man my hips are bruised//

faMBa$e Bitch ass niggas Bean Town thats how im doing it....enjoy life make money.....death b4 dishonor
trust no body that aint your fam and fuck that you cant even trust them some times i cant even trust myself lil niggas.....1
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Old 04-24-04, 12:48 PM   #7
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Alright' ... Take This Or Leave It!! (My Advice To You) - - - No Disrespect!

First: You Aint Need To Use (.........) In Your Shit Fucks Up Your Flow, And Throws Your Structure Off Balance!!

Second: No Need To Put Some Of Your Shit In Caps' .. For Real! This Also Fucks Up Your Flow' Unless You Are Trying To Get A Point Across' ... lol!!! Aight!!

Thirdly: You Could Use Some Work On Your Vocabulary, Wordplay, & Your Multies' ... Also Creativity!! And It's All Good From There!!


Overall It Was A Pretty Safe 'Verse' ..!!! (Nice Work)


Try Out For "LyriKal DestruKtion": Drop A 6-10 Lines In There And Me And Killah Bwoy Will Let You Know If Your In Or Not' .. If Your Still Looking For A Crew!' ..
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