feedback on the lyrix plz, i aint writin the intro n shit so just check....


Did u ever think that u would b this rich?-
Fuck that keep ya bats, keep ya gats, keep ya crack i dont need non of that-
i'ma sell album stax n get platnum plax n keep spittin facts-
like....

if i ever need cash i wont jack a stash or jack a car just to crash i'll get a job fast-
leave the past in the past thats why i spit about the future an post these rymes on ma computer-
Its pewter how cats claim they gone shoot-ya-
i'll just commute ya, an stand in yo face, how u gonna claim u god-like when u dont even say grace?-
i'm outta place, cuz i aint no gangster, i just rip fake cats n call em wanksters-
from pranksters 2 bankers no one ever hands out thank'ya's
but muthafukkaz r always quick to skank'ya's-
.....did u ever think that u could see the day, were kids any race any colour could mix an play? no way cuz theres always issues to stand in the way-
well all i gotta say is dont bring ya issues my way--

--check--

Did you ever think you'd see a sky so blue n clear? without gunsmoke n fear-
a place were anyone anyware can walk safely without havin to watch they rear-
what year? what time? all i see is a nine an a thug doin crime shits so sublime thats why i write ma rymes-
been there done that but i had to burn the t-shirt-
cuz when i think of the things i've done ma mind hurts-
thats why i chose to convert and invert ma bad ways-
cuz at least i know in ma heart i'm gonna see them shiney sun rays----


ive only been workin on it 4 like an hour or so but gimme sum feedback...its up for a collab also, audio though...

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always gotta up my shit....fukk all these sleepers....

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Not bad.......... could use a little work. What beat are yo gonna put it to? The one I thought about in my head didn't really fit with it but it seemed like what you were tryin to flow wit.............

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i dont know, i been spittin it out to the 'who am i' instrumental, one of cam'rons beats but ima get a beat made 4 it not the same 1 as his....

sum type of breezy blowin in the wind beat, like the blast (talib kweli) or sutten.....

any mo ideas....peeps?

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ya nice shyt feelin it..i think in some areas u coulda said something else to make it hotter but overall it was good i would collab wit u but i aint no audio head only text and ma poor ass cant afford a mic lol na jk but nice shyt keep it up
~1~

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RV's Only 3 Time Topical Tourney Champion

yo i'm always down 4 a text collab, its just too gangsta lmao

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Your flows are soundin heavy!!!

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yea this shit sounds nice, all of ure flows ive read flow sick with good wordplay and off the hook vocab n multies.....

another nice drop.

thnx 4 replies.

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