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Old 04-30-04, 04:37 AM   #1
Darkman
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Gimme some feedback

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Just a quick 16 lines i thought up

Dumb motherfucka u bes watch yourself, cos
Chattin shit to me is detrimental to your health, I'd
Go stealth...as i break into ya home,
Leave you inya bed,6 shots in ya dome,
Shots inda kneecaps,shots to da brain, try
Go against my flow,cuz,you must be insane,
Minor motherfuckers, they can't even see me...I'm
Way above dem yet they try to be me
Yo...i don't care bout a record deal,
Dat shit doesn't make an MC ill,
As KRS-One said truthfully, 'a
Dope MC is a dope MC',
I'll slay your team like I was Jason,
Steppin up to me,ya dunno who you're facin,
It be darkman epitomy of crazy, i'll
Bus you inda eyeball n make your vision hazy

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Old 04-30-04, 04:43 AM   #2
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nice nice
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Old 04-30-04, 05:34 AM   #3
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ok...for a newb this was ok...use multis and adavanse rhyme schheme to make it dope...nice try..keep it up..p\ out
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Old 04-30-04, 10:00 AM   #4
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Thanks for da feedback people.
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Old 04-30-04, 12:29 PM   #5
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aite u nice..u sound like pac
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