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Old 04-29-04, 08:24 PM   #1
Mentalist
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Just a lil sumthin

IP: 0EB2 26E5

Runya crib glocks out heavy wit steel
Bustya rib heaters up cookin a meal
Takin it fast niggaz be snitchin fo cash
Put’em in plastic bags if cops breakin them cash
like sanford & son they just talking that trash
I aint hear shit if they missin niggaz don’t ask
Cuz u could be next
lifeless body possessed
only thing they found was a shotty and vest
Teflon but the chest gone
Shoulda stuck to Kevlar
cuz a desert e to the face
have ya memories erased
cuz u be next ta god like pastor ma$e
or pastor troy
we ready like energizers we outlast wit toys
u want sum enough lead 4 a pencil factory
ghetto mathmaticians even forgot to factor me
underrated and hated on
but still i made it on
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Old 04-29-04, 08:37 PM   #2
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yo this was a pretty basic spit but it was decent. learn to structure ur verses and up the vocab nice drop tho i liked the ending and the way it flowed and wat it meant. nice man


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Old 05-02-04, 08:00 PM   #3
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uppin fo feed back
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Old 05-02-04, 08:34 PM   #4
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Not to bad but work on ur structure,Vocab,and overall flow.

5/10
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