Aiight da lowdown
No crew, d/r, or hate votes
No Feedin
10-12 lines
5 votes to win
3 in a row is a KO
Rhymes due 24 hours after checkin
You spittin first

Peace and Props

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Better make it a blind spit, cuz ima hafta post mines tomarrow morning....
checkn In
O

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Aiight I'm feelin that, I got to go to work anyway, I'll post mine later....

Checkin in

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aaight, this is just a quickey....wrote it this mornin here at werk....

Ayo, check my speech, I breechd the Underworld/
This fags HELL ON Guys, I chill under girls/
No wonder the worlds turn, Seein Hell on Earth/
Im scared of Fakes Too, wearin a Revlon Purse/
you need to think quick, re-click, and stop ya weak pen/
you could write rhymes from a motel and they still wouldnt be INN/
I weaken ya pulse, make this geek-in-the-Post-/
ghost, turn hell on earth to a week-at-the-coast/
I spit tripples, doubles and sell dubs for nickles/
while you walk thru the clubs hopin to brush against nipples/

Omen of ELMNTz....Rabid Flock.....
pz
O

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Aiight up and out

Ya first mistake was registering on the website RB//1
The second one was tryin to elevate ya skill against me//2
You always talkin ghetto, all you do is gangsta rap//3
You is about as ghetto as Mr. Rogers on Prozac//4
Is -O- for "Oh No", cuz we both you got "no flow"//5
Ya like Vannila Ice in Harlem, you should be a no show//6
A bar farther, a day longer, ya still no smarter//7
If ya skill was a lightbulb, ya house would be darker//8
Ya flows like the "Colorado River" no one gives a "dam"//9
Ya might as well be Irish cuz ya skillz are a sham// (as in Shamrock)10
so for dis ending I'ma lay you down six feet in the ground//11
Ya body will be like ya skillz bithc, they never be found//12

Aiight of da dome

Peace and props lets get votin

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O: Opening: If his name was Hell On Guys that would've been a nice punch but it didnt really do nothing for me. Flow: Simple and Basic Vocab: Plain
Punches: You had one about writing rhymes at a hotel and they still wouldn't be INN. This was the only one I remember being decent. Closing: Average

Hell On Earth: Opening was basic. Flow was basic. Vocab was plain. There were no punches in this whole rhyme worth mentioning. Closing was plain.

Only reason I'm giving this to O is because he demonstrated a punchline where Hell On Earth had none.

Vote: O

http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=124224(Please vote on this battle)

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Thanx for the crits, The Line was me playin Off of his name as in, like if someone was playin off of mine and yell oh instead of O...
newaze thanx for the input

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Aiight yeah uppin fer votes

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This battle was decent.... heres my breakdown


O - You came with an o.k opening- The flow was tight throughout the whole verse but the punchlines you displayed didn't hit super hard except for one or two. The verse itself I give a 7 out of 10.

Hell On Earth - While its obvious you have the concept down- and you know what your trying to accomplish-I think that your punchlines weren't really thought out and didn't have that kick that sometimes makes me chuckle. This might be because when you rhyme you seem to rhyme with only one syllable when the structure you use might call for two or three. I think if you can improve on this and making your punches hit harder you will be extremely nasty. As your verse stands now I give it a High 5 out of 10. I like the way you rhymes look right now and Ima be lookin for elevation.

This Battle goes to O in my opinion.

IM gonna give this to Hell his shit was aight even though not that good but it was aight
O ur shit was aight as well but not as good as Hell
Elevate on Structure both of yall

Keep elevating

CHECK MY BATTLE OUT AND RETURN THE FAVOR!!!!!!!!! heres the link

http://community.rapbattles.com/sho...19&page=2&pp=15

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aight, i don't see how the hell ya could give this verse to O, he had maybe one punch in his verse. hell- you had some aight punches mr rogers on prozac and the colorado dam, shows you can make a punch, somethin o needs to work on

vote - hell

This was a close battle, after I read O's verse I thought he had it for sure the flow was tight the punches were hard and they hit. But Hell's punches were that much tighter the opener was harder than O's as well as the closer that might have been the deciding factor.

aight battle i gess. O's shit was weak. had no decent punches, a pretty weak flow and no complexity. HellOnEarth just had more punches, thats it. he got O with just punches.

vot - HellOnEarth

return tha fava?

http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=124183