yo check this shit

this is gonna be a sub-division of AI for topical heads

we already got me, UnHoly Wun & HeXen in

this is the tryouts section
we lookin for more playaz to get in this shit

it'll be the first topical crew
and it'll be linked with the hott AI crew

so if u have done any topical battles before then drop some links
if not then drop a 10-15 line verse on one of these topics

- teenage love
- committing murder
- parenthood

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ok....hvnt done this b4...but chk it....Commiting Murder...

sweat pouring,dark night...bright lights all around/
sirens blaring..making their way to the battle ground/
young nigga lay,eyes blurry,bloodshot..serious error/
cops swarming my way,frozen stiff...shaking with terror/
as his eyes rolled back...i dropped my gat,fell to my knees/
neva meant to kill this cat...tears rollin,cryin out god please/
police all around,..i had no choice,i`d just ended both our lifes/
smashed face down..handcuffs on,cutting through me like knifes/

iron grip 2 my throat..murderer woz the words they spoke/
cops beating on me,.....callin....."death row",as they joked/
think uz tough nigga?...weak bitch,shuda neva pulled tha trigga/
bang,bang..2 caps in ma leg..."i say we should leave him 4 dead"/
please,please i screamed...woz an accident god please/
cops kicked...punched,beating on tha holes in ma knees/
as i arrived at the station..broken and torn...cops threw me out/
one cop said.."i had to shoot him,he woz gonna take my man out/


aiight think i went a bit off tha point,n i cuda done more...but hit me up n lemme know wot u think...........

ok for ure first topical that was sum gud shit

u had gud flow and structure and ure first part was tight shit
u had gud wordplay and u stayed on topic all the way
the second part u began to fall off topic slightly, not completely but u still kept up ure wordplay and shit
Overall i'd give that spit 7/10
u got a lot of potential to be a gud topical and no one is perfect their first time aight

My opinion u in this shit cuz the crew is especially for playaz who are tryin to elevate their skillz and broaden their range instead of just stickin to simple battles!!

I'll tlk to UnHoly bout u and let u know playa

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MeGaHurtZ

standard precautionary for MoTiF

u gotta have at least 5 victories under ure belt
either that or u've gotta be extremely sick playa

SORRY!! DENIED!!!

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unholy is part of this? ugh

i was feelin it until I read that

ne way..g'luck wit ur crew dawg


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Im not good at topical... but thanks for the offer King... peace

Good Luck wit this

no one wants to get in this shit

c'mon we tryin to broaden our battlin skillz to topicals to

get in this man, it gone be hott

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LOl King Solo got the Teenage Love Idea from me...Ever since I made it in Open mic..I guess ya seen it and decided to make it a topic for dis..LOL its aight..but heres the link to mah Teenage Love...Dat I guess ya got the idea off of
http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=124710

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yo nice shit playa
but dont ask me whether u are in
cuz i'm out of this shit now

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yea I know you and killah have yalls own Crew...I wasnt tryin out...I was juss makin sure dats what ya got the idea from...Thanks for liking it..LOL..But Yea I know..I wasnt tryin out I just was makin sure.

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yea ure shit was tight son

u wanna join mine and killah's crew
that shit gone be tight

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hmmmmmmm....I have to think really strongly about dis...Yalls crew is tight..and stuff..I like it..But I have to think..I will give ya the answer sometime aight..Good luck wit da crew..I might join juss give me some time..LOL

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I might juss join But ill give ya the answer later tonight or tomarr aight

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