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Old 05-16-04, 12:46 AM   #1
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In 10 years, I can't believe man I'll be 24. Own a couple cars and Live good. ...with my homies we been in this since we's kids. People sayin that's Little E holdin on this biz. I remember hangin on the block with the boys
goin to the dollar movies me and C played dodge the ball. We had fun even though times was hard. I mean, me and Lance played Dreamcast. I can't believe my lil whodie lost his life in a car crash. One day you here then you gone. Ya heard me? Grampa say you got game then you gotta have a plan. I thank Moms and Pops for raisin me man. I see kids get shot. Some go to
jail and when you die lil whodie, is it Heaven or Hell. I wanna be like Mike I mean ball and make money. Keep it real with my peeps and never act funny. I see kids on drugs go to school and commit crimes. We used to fight, lil whodie, but now it's stakes and knives. Stay in school get a job. Education it goes fars. Man there's gotta be more to life than just jewelry and cars.
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Old 05-16-04, 12:52 AM   #2
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The flow was deep son, I liked that...

some contructive criticism:

Try setting up your flow in bars, so its easier to read
And watch the repeating of whodie...

Also something I found ironic and funny at the same time was the line "Education it goes fars." lmfao...

Good shit though, keep elevatin'
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Old 06-02-04, 01:07 PM   #3
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it was ok btu it was kinda wack but u need to keep workin on ur game ok kid ..........................
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