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Old 05-26-04, 08:10 PM   #1
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Some War shit: I need some feedback Pls!!!

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Yo I wrote this while I was In Fallujeh Iraq (Im in the Army 82nd Airborne! ) Check it out and let me know what you think.

It's Crazy, fuckin Iraqi's tryin to kill a kid
So i gotta keep a "peace" in my hand like the hippies did
These cats tryin to send a hot one to my dome
they probably mad cuz we blew up their home
We here tryin to give a little help
But on the real we tryin to take they wealth
I get so sick, my blood starts to boil
to think that this war is all over oil
While i stay tryin & my boys stay dyin
politicians back at home they stay lyin
But I guess I can say its all good
Better to die here than dyin in the hood
At least here my fam gets a piece of change
a little bit of dough to help them maintain
But still the same, I think they'd rather have me here
cuz if i can't raise my daughter it wouldn't be fair
And I still drop a tear when I think of when I left
but I aint scared cuz I know God knows best
UNLESS....
All this is done in vain
Nobody would ever trade the sun for the rain
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Old 05-26-04, 09:22 PM   #2
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yo that was deep now i got some insight on whats really going on over there but i was feelin sat piece stay up n alive much love
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Old 05-27-04, 01:26 AM   #3
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For sure some deep shit, and if your still out ther, watch your back, u one motherfucker that doesnt deserve to die. Godbless man, hopefully your destiny unfolds...
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Old 05-27-04, 09:15 AM   #4
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it was some deep shyt i mean it could use a lil improvement but overall good spit yo can u hit dis up wit a fair vote

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