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PoTeNtIaL |
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0 | 0% |
DeLeon |
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5 | 100.00% |
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Topical: DeLeon Vs. PoTeNtIaL
IP:
aight playa since we already got our verses just drop it here
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OH yeah The Topic: The day the Condom broke Just fucked this ho...... Ho: Yawn..DeLeon wake up D: What... Ho: ......BadNewz....The Condom Broke D: NOOOOOOOOO!!!! GOT DAMN!! The condom broke! Man this is some bullshit/ Wrong as playin Russian Roulette wit a war vet and a full clip/ Then the questions started. Why did I fuck? Why did I lay on this bed?/ Why couldn’t I follow the flow and let this ho give me head instead?/ “A damn shame. Then the question came “Who can I blame?”/ I’m goin insane my mind putting too much strain on my brain/ “I got it. Dat nigga came before me who was getting it wet?”/ He heard me and said “I aint beat, she swallowed my skeet. I knew better than that”/ I’m not stuck maybe she too drunk to know who just fucked/ Then I heard, “DeLeon, you were the best” Damn! No such luck/ “Look bitch, get this straight, this shit never took place/ And after tonight’s over I don’t wanna see yo face/ No need to blow shit all out of proportion/ If you get pregnant you can just get an abortion”/ We tried to get an abortion but shit aint work out right/ We got jumped by lines of people wit picket signs screamin out “PRO LIFE”/ I was fightin back, but they had more demonstrators than RB has haters/ I blacked out and woke up in a hospital 8 MONTHS LATER!!/ I went to check myself out then a doctor saw me and screamed/ “DeLeon! Follow me to room two-fourteen”/ So I’m walkin around, ass stickin out the hospital gown/ And I’m thinking ‘how can life get any worse, I got beat the fuck down.’/ I walked into the room and saw my whole life swirlin around in my head/ The bitch from the party was in the bed wit a baby on her legs/ “They sent you for me? Why even bother,” I asked the doctor/ His reply almost made me cry, “Sir you’re the child’s father.”/ Man I swear, I almost broke down right there/ My whole life just turned into a fuckin nightmare/ Just when I was thinking “Why couldn’t this bitch just get hit by a truck”/ She said “I’ma name him DeLeon.” I was like WHAT THE FUCK!!!/ “Look charcoal black lady I’ll break yo spine/ That mutated lookin crack baby aint mine”/ I swear on my life I’ll burn down yo house and you’ll be on the street/ If you tell anybody that fuckin child belong to me”/ Then she said “I’ll name him after my next favorite rapper,FlOw InTeLLiGeNt / But wont he get mad the kid has his name but no Intelligence/ “I swear bitch, you goin see yo house wit flames on it/ If I find out that birth certificate got my name on it”/ and no yall..I aint for abortion |
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Middle Weight
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IP:
nice drop, i'll vote wen potential spits....this one shud be good battle..
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Biggie got killed when the shit gon' stop" Layzee Bone, Change Tha World "With every dark night, there's a bright day after that"
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Still Raw
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IP:
Sorry couldnt drop yesterday...good luck to everyone, and good drop....
An angel sent to Earth, the one girl that I adored legs buckled, getting weak, blood starting to soar Dating for a while now, each day she got me riled Freezing from loneliness, easily fixed up by her smile Time for the next step, was ready for it all except My stomach leapt before asking, the secret that I kept Asked if she was prepared, Felt like a game of truth or dare Silence was deadly, The first of our penetrations in her stare Took her hand in mine, and I looked straight into her eyes The problems to arise, seem swept away by her convincing lies She said “I’m ready to do this, I have no fears in me or doubts” Soon as the line was finished, all my problems were flushed out Her virginity, a flower never harvested, yes still was aiming to bloom The gloom filled at my house, phone ringing, filled with my loves doom Secret swept the phone, as I heard a women’s gruesome voice Reluctant to keep talking, but it seemed to no longer be my choice “I told you to never call me again, it was only a one time thing” Foreshadowed the sting of my heart, punishment for my summer fling “The condom broke, and I’m expecting to deliver at anytime” Time froze for a moment, felt like I was the one to commit a crime Kept staring at the phone, the words just couldn't escape my throat She said “come meet me soon” so put on my hat and my coat Arrived at her house, hoping what she spoke were nothing but jokes Then when I felt her stomach that’s when my heart just broke “My life’s over I said” and what about the girl I love The angel sent from God to me, will she still send me her love? Dialed the 7 numbers that were premonitions of my death She would control the outcome, give me life, or death in her breath Explained to her what happened, an impact that rocked her brain And then she burst out crying......feeling of death in me again Parents never accept the child, one born of shameful wedlock Time for talk had diminished, phone hung, heading for my glock Didn’t love her yet she tried to stop me, the moment that I began to cry My hand on the baby one more time, and felt forced , and relieved to die Another perspective I Heard a loud noise, then I could feel my mothers pain Screeching noises, my ears wasn’t able to sustain Floating around but sad, then these memories started to enter me Coming quick and painful, entering my mind through forcefully But reached for it too, new life, born again, would never have any harm Then I screamed in horror, as It ripped it straight out of me Couldn't see, no my other arm was tearing, complete agony Legs now torn off, head ripped, surrounded by my blood to only cry This started as my first life ended, living just to die............... *loud noise, is gun shot, sirens is ambulence, the guy was reincarnated as the baby ^^added the explanation in case poeple didnt get it good luck mayn, and good drop....... |
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come on..lets get some votes on this tight ass topical
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GrOwN aSs MaN
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IP:
Lemme re-read this and drop again...
On a scale of 1-10, 10 being the highest: DELEON Rhyme Scheme:7 Flow:7 Imagery:7 Wordplay:5 Vocabulary:6 Creativity:6 Storyline:6 Entertainment Value:6 Total out of 80 points possible: 50 **I like how you jumped right into the topic. Stand out lines: “They sent you for me? Why even bother,” I asked the doctor/ His reply almost made me cry, “Sir you’re the child’s father.”/ Man I swear, I almost broke down right there/ My whole life just turned into a fuckin nightmare/ POTENTIAL Rhyme Scheme:7 Flow:7 Imagery:6 Wordplay:5 Vocabulary:6 Creativity:5 Storyline:5 Entertainment Value:6 Total out of 80 points possible: 47 Stand out lines: “The condom broke, and I’m expecting to deliver at anytime” Time froze for a moment, felt like I was the one to commit a crime Kept staring at the phone, the words just couldn't escape my throat She said “come meet me soon” so put on my hat and my coat **In my view, you didn't start off on topic and took too long to address the topic. Vote: Deleon...more focused verse |
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DLeon:
Rhyme Scheme:6 Flow:6 Imagery:6 Wordplay:4 Vocabulary:5 Creativity:5 Storyline:7 Entertainment Value:6 44/80 PoTenTial: Rhyme Scheme:7 Flow:7 Imagery:7 Wordplay:5 Vocabulary:6 Creativity:6 Storyline:6 Entertainment Value:6 50/80 OveraLL: I Think his verse was more overall better & very concept. Both werse nice verses. But "Potential" won by an edge!
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DAMN!!!!!!! Listen ya need 255 posts to vote.....thats how i know you didnt
read this shit...fucken D/R |
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uppin dis shit for more votes.....
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Umm...Yeah
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DeLeon: okay this was nice as usual....... umm weird ass topical tho for
real.....you had nice flow the rhyme scene was pretty good, punches hmm...... it was better than your flow really feeling it for real....... originality & creativity were both on point, concept good overall: 8/10 PoTeNtIaL: okay this was good flow fell off a lil but it came back on point after a while, good punches better than your flow, originality was okay and creativity good...........................concept good as well okay....... overall: 7/10 okay Potential your flow lost the battle for you in my opinion.......... weird topical seriously (do a honest vote on my shit the links in my signature)
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Middle Weight
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IP:
i'll use 40's example to show what i thought of this battle.
DLeon: Rhyme Scheme:7/10 Flow:6/10 Imagery:7/10 Wordplay:7/10 Vocabulary:6/10 Creativity:7/10 Storyline:7/10 Entertainment Value:8/10 Overall:62/80 PoTenTial: Rhyme Scheme:6/10 Flow:8/10 Imagery:7/10 Wordplay:7/10 Vocabulary:6.5/10 Creativity:7.5/10 Storyline:6/10 Entertainment Value:7/10 Overall:55/80 Why?: Deleon had a real nice verse, i loved it to be honest. had a good concept and nice story line and had a bit of comedy in there. nice drop that one. potential did good too. had real nice flow which is what stood out for me. tha vocab was good but not as well used as deleon. tha storyline was okay but it was good how u showed another perspective. it was a close battle but i think deleon took it, his was juz a slight bit better. props to ya both, nice battle vote = deleon
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"First we lost Eazy, then we lost Pac
Biggie got killed when the shit gon' stop" Layzee Bone, Change Tha World "With every dark night, there's a bright day after that"
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Stop sleepin and Vote DAMN IT!! lol
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