Hi, I hope this isn't out of place. Sorry if so.
I wrote this and was just wanting some opinions as to what you get out of this more than I care about 'style' critique but will axxept all.
thankz

Oooops, sorry, here is the writing:



I know you gotta grow

I tried every angle even some written down in books,
I awakened to the asian star with thoughts of you not far.
I vowed that I would stand for you, no matter what it took.
I stood ...


I know you gotta grow, I know one day you may go,,
but is this the way our wayz to be for you and me?

The visions of youth and elder are not always the same color,
but the spirit and wisdoms in the end resemble one another.


All that is read or said in your heart and in your head
Abosorbed or ignored, how you being led?
Are you sure you're on the outside looking inside
Or testing your edges, being eaten by your own pride
Reality check,check-check, don't wreck, take a sec


I'm the Dad you had, but now you don't want or have need
The root of your seed, your the last name of our breed
The prodigal of the perverbial prodigal, even Saul became Paul.
For now consider this as Chapter 1, verse 17,
Now it's all about being 18, the verse and dream.



.... for now <clikndaswitch>.......

I Liked That Part Da Best. It Was Good Though Even Though U Might Wanna Put It In The poetry Section

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