10 line battle, one verse each. spit verse after this post

okay u spit first and then i'll check in and spit somethin'

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my verse

is this guy gay? hes starings into my eyes like hes hypnotised//
he aint got nothin to say, he thinks hes won but hes fantasized//
hes fifteen, i guess he wants to try shit and experiment//
too young for pussy so he fucked his dads car exhaust vent//
in my career, he wont even add a dent, he wants me in his crew//
he PMed me "holy shit dood i totally need you, every word i speak is true!"//
cant you understand why he wants to ride or die?//
imagine a woman on her back, if he said he seen it then hes spat a lie//
he thinks he spits quick, thats only after he sips dick and lets the cum drip//
this cunt uses so much anal lube stick he does lightning shit//

my turn

look ill a fag cuz he sucks on dicks/
Sydney ain't ben shit since the fuckin' olympics/
and if you ask about me then you know i stay wit the mack/
runnin' around in his backyard wit kangaroo jack/
and smirf is a gangster and i'm always wild/
so go back home and play wit your crocadiles/
and you gotta lot of heat thinkin' that you would win this/
but you about to get fired like the fuckin' apprentice/
we know you gay on all the fuckin' dicks you be slurpin'/
but yu a faggot ass nigga probably go to jail on purpose/

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punches/smirf 30-35%
flow/smirf 15-20%
multi's/ill 5%
creativity/both 15-20%
vocab/ill 15-20%
overall effectivness/smirf 10-20%
this was a pretty even battle but ill ya punches werent hittin like smirf's did,if ya had either better punches or flow i think ya would have had this...vote/smirf

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I think that smirf is PMing his buds and getting them to vote for him, because this is a one sided battle. Sorry Smirf, but there's no way anyone should vote for your lines. You'll improve though, but right now they're weak. The punchlines are hidden there... someone where, but in time you'll learn to let them out full force.

Ill was came funny, hard, and had multies and shit.

vote- Ill

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ILL IS IT -
is this guy gay? hes starings into my eyes like hes hypnotised//
he aint got nothin to say, he thinks hes won but hes fantasized//
Nice opener...but gay jokes r played
hes fifteen, i guess he wants to try shit and experiment//
too young for pussy so he fucked his dads car exhaust vent//
haha alright punch..
in my career, he wont even add a dent, he wants me in his crew//
he PMed me "holy shit dood i totally need you, every word i speak is true!"//
hahaha ok punch but i dunno if its a true personal
cant you understand why he wants to ride or die?//
imagine a woman on her back, if he said he seen it then hes spat a lie//
mmm alright.. nothin special
he thinks he spits quick, thats only after he sips dick and lets the cum drip//
this cunt uses so much anal lube stick he does lightning shit//
Meh the gay jokes are played...

YOUNG SMIRF -
look ill a fag cuz he sucks on dicks/
Sydney ain't ben shit since the fuckin' olympics/
gay jokes = played
and if you ask about me then you know i stay wit the mack/
runnin' around in his backyard wit kangaroo jack/
haha kinda funny
and smirf is a gangster and i'm always wild/
so go back home and play wit your crocadiles/
meh nothin special...
and you gotta lot of heat thinkin' that you would win this/
but you about to get fired like the fuckin' apprentice/
hah not bad...
we know you gay on all the fuckin' dicks you be slurpin'/
but yu a faggot ass nigga probably go to jail on purpose/
Gay jokes = Played

[b]Overall both of these spits were played as fuck... Gay jokes are played.. dont use em unless they are original.. and even then they are played.. I think Ill had some forced rhymes.. but Smirf didnt come complex at all.. vocab is goin to ILL IS IT.. Structure is goin to be a tie.. personals are goin to SMIRF.. punches are goin to ILL... Overall as ILL has two of te 4 sections I explained my vote is going to go to ILL..

VOTE ILL

smurf had this, his shit was funny as hell. And i htink his punchs came harder. I think ill won when it comes to Vocabulary, but Smurf got my vote.

V/smurf

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ILL'S DROP:

is this guy gay? hes starings into my eyes like hes hypnotised//
he aint got nothin to say, he thinks hes won but hes fantasized//
UMMM AIGHT OPENER FOR THIS BATTLE 6/10
hes fifteen, i guess he wants to try shit and experiment//
too young for pussy so he fucked his dads car exhaust vent//
AIGHT AIGHT IT WAS A OKAY PUNCH......7.5/10
in my career, he wont even add a dent, he wants me in his crew//
he PMed me "holy shit dood i totally need you, every word i speak is true!"//
OKAY NOT THAT SPECIAL IN MY EYES......6.5/10
cant you understand why he wants to ride or die?//
imagine a woman on her back, if he said he seen it then hes spat a lie//
OKAY LAME PUNCH NOT FEELING IT 6/10
he thinks he spits quick, thats only after he sips dick and lets the cum drip//
this cunt uses so much anal lube stick he does lightning shit//
WOW ANOTHER GAY JOKE.....6.5/10

OVERALL: 6.5/10///65%

YOUNG'S DROP:

look ill a fag cuz he sucks on dicks/
Sydney ain't ben shit since the fuckin' olympics/
GAY JOKE DID THAT BEFORE QUITTING THAT SHIT NOW!!!!!!!3/10
and if you ask about me then you know i stay wit the mack/
runnin' around in his backyard wit kangaroo jack/
WHACK MAD D/R'S IN HERE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!4/10
and smirf is a gangster and i'm always wild/
so go back home and play wit your crocadiles/
SELF GLORY 1ST LINE, WEAK 2ND LINE PUNCH 5/10
and you gotta lot of heat thinkin' that you would win this/
but you about to get fired like the fuckin' apprentice/
SHIT WEAK AGAIN.....5/10
we know you gay on all the fuckin' dicks you be slurpin'/
but yu a faggot ass nigga probably go to jail on purpose/
OK THAT WAS JUST ONE WEAK ASS CLOSER....4/10

OVERALL:4.2/10///42%

damn you got mad dickriders he should of knocked you out shit man........

vote: Ill Is It?

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ayo, i give my vote 2 smirf cuz hiz shit wuz funny, and he had a bunch of stuff that he could only use on ill is it, b-cuz it wuz stuff about austraillia. besides tha part where ill is it said ride or die, he could have already had hiz verse writtin. smirf had good punches. they both had gay jokes, but i think that smirf's were better. nom sizlaxin mayn? vote= Smirf, werd


Crew vote removed

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This shit's full of crew votes, time to get y'all DQed....

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