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Old 06-24-04, 12:37 AM   #1
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1.Battle

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(Chours 2X)
who wants to battle me? lets take it to the battle floor
im spittin so much game, you dont want ne more
my ryhmes are hardcore, ill leave in so much pain
cause so much damage to the brain, aint that insane?

Verse 1
when you wanna battle me, dont even try me
if you do, this is gonna be your worst tradady
in your life, im warning you, this aint no joke
if you come up to me dont even try to provoke
i dont think you want your rapping carrear revoked
when you battle me.... you cant even spit
slap you with the pad, stab you wit the pen you write wit
i spit wit vile, your best writ cant beat my freestyle
you style? your is wack its suck a disgrace
theres a place for your waste i cant even discribe
the place but you have to face it cause thas the case
and i put MC's in hospitals cause of the damage
you may think im the underdog, but i got the advantage
of winning against these other MC's
im biggie, you punches are like his fans they miss me
and yea im asian dont temp me or ill bring out bruce lee
(CHOURS 2X)

Verse 2
you have the courage to step, but i dont need to compete
you have your mind set on beat, but im too elite
im so hard to defeat, so you juss listen and take a seat
i think you have leaks in you rhymes
i spit knouckout, you only spit punchlines
but thas fine, ill always be ill
bring the excorsist, you still wont posses skill
you never will, so you need to stop tryin
sayin you the best, but we kno you lyin
when lookin at me, no makin eye to eye
i get up on stage wit confidence and pride
you juss gotta recgonize , im the grand prize
look at me then analyze, you could see the fire in my eyes
when im done spittin, you realise you juss been beatin
you feel the heat? thas my lyrics when i start to speak
after battlein me, there was a misson
that you have finnaly learned your lesson
(Chours 3X)


Please reply 1 out of 10, I kno it sucks
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Old 06-24-04, 05:34 AM   #2
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I liked it, your rhymes carried on on the next line, that was nice! Concept isn't original but that's ok. Flow was pretty good, vocab could be better. Some rhymes could be better but overall: it's ok! Give it a 6,5/10 (and that's good in my opinion, a 6 is good, a 7 is pretty nice, a 8 is real good, a 9 is close to perfection, a 10 is not possible )
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