aight its set up....u spit first
here are the rules:
no feedin
no hatin
no crew votes
Due 30 minutes after check in

J DOT spit this murder version/
whether its me or in third person/
i know its workin, cause u tellin everybody 'I Shot Ya' nigga/
it wasnt my fault, dont ever move when my fingers on da trigga/
had u jumpin up like tigga, but u been that way/
u from the underground dawg, u better stay that way
new to RB, thats one thing me and u got in common/
our differences are far apart, like the legs of yo baby momma/
u dont want drama, i aint gon' shoot but dont test ya self/
i kno niggas that'll rest ya health, u better check ya self/
before u get hit for whats under yo belt/
this aint the 'wizard of oz' show, but i'll 'watch u melt'/
and i wont be 'sympathetic', cause yo 'methods pathetic'/
i aint even heard u spit, but i kno that i'm better/
get yo berretta, and let's go 'Wild Wild West'/
i'll be the 'best' in RB, after i put the 'rest' to 'rest'/



hurry up and spit...i didnt kno how long u wanted it, so i just ended it

c'mon...times almost up...did i have to check in first...my bad, i just spit, but that should be a check in...hurrry up n rip already...get bac here quick

aiyo...fuk it, u took too long, u said 30 min. i won by default...hurry up

no nigga u didn't win..notice i said 30 minutes after check in...i neva checked in so there for the battle still goin....lets gets this right...i had shit to do more important than this but im bout to drop aight

yo aight here is my check in .....im bout to drop right now

J DOt can get shot nigga you not hot
get popped like a bottle top, shells leave u twisted
im ballistic with this rap shit you just a punk bitch
take ya place leave you in silence in the back of a hurse
You can get knocked out wit the left but my right is even worse
My flow is nasty so please back the fuck up off me
I shot ya bitch I aint the fuggees wont be killin you softley
Get murked nigga it was fun your done what more could u want cunt
Dont get dropped off some kid find you at there easter egg hunt
And you aint really ready for war bitch my style is bigger
finger itchin the trigger put a patch on your eye like a pirate nigga
Cuz my time my life my work is in these streets
Your energy your focus your all is beatin ya meat bitch

yo good verse son...we gone see who won tho aight...eitha way it was a good battle for two begginers

Can Yall Please Vote On One Of Ma Battles, Keep It Real Tho, Peace

COME VOTE ON THIS BATTLE(and be real)...im bout to go vote for other battles right now...check me out

yo lets go....lets get some real votes in here fa real im tired of seein this battle 0-0....come on now people

J DOT:

J DOT spit this murder version/
whether its me or in third person/
-decent opener, short punch but its a good set up
i know its workin, cause u tellin everybody 'I Shot Ya' nigga/
it wasnt my fault, dont ever move when my fingers on da trigga/
-shit line, wasn't even a filler....but it was horrible/ no word play
had u jumpin up like tigga, but u been that way/
u from the underground dawg, u better stay that way
-underground isnt bad...unless your saying your a multi million dollar album producer, and hes still sellin bootleg cd's
new to RB, thats one thing me and u got in common/
our differences are far apart, like the legs of yo baby momma/
-nice comedy lines, comedy lines have there own way of swaying votes, but this line lacked structure and word play as well, would have been funny
u dont want drama, i aint gon' shoot but dont test ya self/
i kno niggas that'll rest ya health, u better check ya self/
before u get hit for whats under yo belt/
this aint the 'wizard of oz' show, but i'll 'watch u melt'/
-idk if you were trying for mutlis or what...but these were garbage
and i wont be 'sympathetic', cause yo 'methods pathetic'/
i aint even heard u spit, but i kno that i'm better/
-this line should have content thats setting up a bomb closure
get yo berretta, and let's go 'Wild Wild West'/
i'll be the 'best' in RB, after i put the 'rest' to 'rest'/
-uhh not good, you need a closure that will stand out when votes come in

I Shot Ya:



J DOt can get shot nigga you not hot
get popped like a bottle top, shells leave u twisted
-i dont understand this at aLL ?
im ballistic with this rap shit you just a punk bitch
-where did this line come from ?
take ya place leave you in silence in the back of a hurse
You can get knocked out wit the left but my right is even worse
-line is streched, shorten it and it would be decent
My flow is nasty so please back the fuck up off me
I shot ya bitch I aint the fuggees wont be killin you softley
-"killen me softly" ive seen this line 15 times already, come original next time
Get murked nigga it was fun your done what more could u want cunt
Dont get dropped off some kid find you at there easter egg hunt
-first line: long but makes sense, but you 2 line was horrible, you have to hit punches
And you aint really ready for war bitch my style is bigger
finger itchin the trigger put a patch on your eye like a pirate nigga
-subject pronoun at the end is bad: "pirate nigga"...example= iLL slaine your Limbs and have you stUck in a wheel chair BRO// dont use this just to rhyme
Cuz my time my life my work is in these streets
Your energy your focus your all is beatin ya meat bitch
-closure: you need much work, but everybody starts out like this, so i believe you'LL elevate if you keep at it...

[COLOR=royalblue][b]Explanation:
word play lacked from each participant, the punches were disasterous attempts to rhyme, but creativity go's to "i shot ya", he had an open mind, J DOT came with better flow but his lines either didnt make sense or were played, he had a decent opener but the rest of his verse lacked any sort of emcee touch, I Shot Ya had a few decent lines, some played some nonsense but those few that he had rose over J DOT....

Vote:
I Shot Ya

~Fem~


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dis was weak battle but some lines were aight nuthin really impressin

personals=even

wordplay=even
punchlines=even

betta flow=I shot ya

both can elevate

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