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Old 07-26-04, 02:27 AM   #1
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Im Back

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yo im back, Ready, still runnin on top/
still underground still runnin hip-hop/
yall talkin shit about packin nines and gats/
fuck all u rookies yall some fake ass cats/
what are yall packin? nuttin but yo dads dicks in yo ass/
tearin u up, rookie i think im gonn have to pass/
u aint worth the rhymes aint worth the lines aint even worth my time/
u recording yo shit and tryin to sell it, but bitch i guarantee u wont see a dime/
from me or from anyone on this forum, not even on the net/
but mine will go platinum, dont believe me, lets make a bet/
i got a new name new letter but its the same ole me/
same ole Redy reppin a brand new company/
u talkin to urself sayin "Ready why me?"/
cuzz u talk hard but admit it u a rookie/
fuck u, ur verses, ur lines, fuck ur whole life/
u lookin for me? im in yo bed, fuckin ya whole wife/
fuck yall rookies, every last one of ya/
u read this, and if u said son of a/
bitch u a rookie, a newbie, nuttin but a small vocab and nuttin to yo name/
get out while u can cuz al of rap is my whole fuckin game/
u shittin out raps, but im spittin it out clean/
ur rap career is over if u know what i mean/

gimme sum feed back on how this is.
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Old 07-26-04, 02:31 AM   #2
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clean rhyme its decent should elevate the rhyme scheme a little bit more..umm welcome back i guess. multies would have played a nice roll in ya verse but u got str8 to the point and got the point across and it was simple yet decent 6/10

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Old 07-26-04, 05:54 AM   #3
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Thats Wack To Simple
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Old 07-26-04, 10:43 AM   #4
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I like how you had yo rap ESCALDA
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