breaking this shit down

MONSOON

Ill stand on the highest mountaain peak vocalizin in tongues,
rhythmetic verses to your heart beat like im callabin with drums........

fuk mann, It still amaze me that you off a beat, pacin up and about in your room
thinkin of a verse to sneak.....
ok opening nothing special 4/10

what you think? your a rap god !?, you more like a rapdoll, you aint no action figure
just a doll with a strapon, suckin on tampons, thats why you the sickest on this site
flow is allrite nothing more 4/10

I see through your hardwood glass, and your a clear picture to snipe
thats serves you right just chill and let my words unite
best bar so far personal 5/10

to form a wind so violent you could hear the leaves when you write
See im new to rb, your a vet to R&B,
whoever votes this cats poll must of pressed the wrong key!!
nice i like it you could'v made it better i can see a way or 2 6/10

19/40
4.75/10

ok your vocab is nice you just need to adjust it making harder punches not much personals and the weak structure got you down try to have one united structure otherwise you lose the flow i see your not bad for a newb you will elevate fast good luck

MARVOLoUsJ1009


i dont think dis quer is hott,fukk vocab i talk about how i wear da glok-
u da "twin tower's" with bar's cuzz in dis battle it took u "year's da drop"-
nice imagination good for an opening 6/10

da whole site could see dat u dumb,first battle already see dat u done-
yeah keep talkin fagget ima send da "5-20" niggaz da be where u "from:"*
i get the punche but i think it missed big time 3/10

stepin 2 a vet da kidds all respected,im da reason ya chick often naked-
even if u was a "dj in a storm" u wouldn't have a "win(d) on ya record-
no relation between the lines in the bar 4/10

why da fukk would even battle marvolousj you know he gon slay ya-
ya moms a hoe dat had more "balls" on her then a "pokemon trainer"-
lol second line made me laugh first is shit though 5/10

u couldn't name a cat who as sick as me,im da cat who u wish da be-
u cant key so u always got a "book in ya hand" like da "statue of liberty"-
if you only had a nice finish as the nice start 4/0

23/50
4.6/10

that verse was weak structure is fine but the flow put me off you had punches that missed no real personals if you can relate your punches to personals you will win easly

i have to give my vote to MOONSOON for having stronger punches and vetter vocab
vote:moonsoon

with respect for both of you

hit up my battles

peace