check in...both verses due before 4:45

16 lines
no crews haters or dickriders

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since you havent checked in yet make it 5 but im not staying up all night waiting

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i dont know what youre doing but heres mine


youre too small to bring it spit some flame and get trampled
i'm still trying to figure out why you're named for a camper
but i dont complain i give advice...for example
all you need to shine is a good sample

so here's how i think you should go
take a line out of my shit and make it sound like its somethin you wrote
build your verse around it and you're bound to sound dope
i won't say nothin and im sure that you won't...wait don't

cause i dont wanna be the reason that you got sad
people left reviews on your shit and youre all mad
"the first 15 bars were garbage but that other one's not bad"
so i guess youre better off thinking of something hot fast

rv...park yourself for this one and don't let it get too scary
cause i wrote this without a thesaurus or a rhyming dictionary
or a beat or a notebook or even a second glance
and even so you dont stand a chance

bet

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u cud disquilfy him ya know if he not postin i think u cud

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nah i dont wanna win like that. tell you what, im gonna go to sleep and ill be up like 1 or 2 tommorrow... if you havent posted by then you are no-show

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i guess this battle, i gotta take a lil lighthearted
cuz you challenging me proves to all that you're retarded
this is me against you, hood taking a hillbilly
i feel like im going one on one with a fake ass TIMMAY!
say u wanted one more battle before your ass went to sleep
but we kno you're just waiting for your porno MP3
to finish up, so then you can get your self to sleep
cleaning up after busting to ur homosexual fantasies
and don't try to comeback with anythin similar 2 mine
i'll shoot you more times than 50 got, leave your punk ass dying
leave your mama crying for ya, then ill fuck her up too
do like you do to gay men and leave her sweating and screwed
but when it all comes to an end, and i'm done battlin you
fact will be fact and ima still rhyme shit better than you
now i was about to smack you up again but it seems your already dead
so i leave you alone now and hit up your mama's bed

sorry....someone shot out our electricity (damn firecrackers) and we lost power for awhile

and finally he arrives...ok people its voting time let me know what you thought

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opener - rv
closer - tie
structure - rv
wordplay - rv
creativity - rv
vocab - rv
punches - rv
personals - ?

v - rv

drop 1 on this shit http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=134062

opener - rv
closer - tie
structure - rv
wordplay - rv
creativity - rv
vocab - rv
punches - rv
personals - ?

v - rv

drop 1 on this shit

http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=134062

^^uppin^^ is too short so i guess ^^uppity-uppin^^^

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^uppin^

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everyones sleepin...ive been voting whats up

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^uppin^

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