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Old 09-03-04, 10:41 PM   #1
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Such a Distrurbed Youngman

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seems people love to see deceitful words of heat
seek and search in me but all you see is evil lurks beneath
from birth ive seen and heard the screams
irreversibly bruised and cut... these shoes are scuffed
and im losing touch with crew cause half them dudes in cuffs!
name been through the dirt but who the fuck hasnt felt horribly
clueless thug but if ya not been thru some hurt u aint lived properly
future's dust but i attempt to cleanse my soul and mend it whole
cause i still have morals! my endless goals dont depend on gold
so send the whole community to fuem at me and tell me im wrong
while they glued to screens and blew their teens on celluar phones

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as little children yappin who'dda think it happen
at 15 my mum had to filter my drinkin habits
begin to panic as i show why i write so numb
cause the only notes in my pockets are suicidal ones
through the night i run but who can truely care and have a view to share
cause we can help the homeless but would we change our shoes for theirs?
at school i rarely learned a sentence i was busy burnin tension
cursin senseless so as you guess it wasnt long till my first suspension
disturbed and sectioned as a nervous wreck i couldnt learn to cope
not concerned with hope as i still struggle to climb on this burnin rope!


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Old 09-03-04, 10:47 PM   #2
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Nice flow and thought...at times it gotta abit ruff to me. But then you picked up and it was a hot joint. I give it a 7/10.
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Old 09-03-04, 11:23 PM   #3
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thanx............................................. .
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Old 09-05-04, 11:16 AM   #4
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uppin
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Old 09-06-04, 12:01 AM   #5
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yeah this was pretty dope im surprised u are 0-3 just keep workin on ur shit.. make ur rhymes a little less basic and uw ill be good..
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