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08-12-04, 01:47 PM | #1 | ||||||
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See Truth
Got bazaar splendor like a bartender add a glad dash Of brandy keep my cash handy but duck the sad trash Sugar cums in layer like a plumb player with girl squeeze Waist and seize lace even make bees chase and twirl these Honeycombs, rip apart freaks and mark with streaks of chalk Intertwine with winter wines come out drunk too weak to walk My mind dim but rhymes trimmed like white lace on velvet Dress, impress groups, test hoops in basketball haven’t fell yet Devastate like storms and lacerate cats arms like a bear claw Compare flaws with good grammar in the streets a pair of jaws Speak and seek hustle. Rap wise and sincerely but criticize severely Like coaches do teams their approaches are keen so recognize clearly No doubt flow clout sometimes without flavor twisting ruff And missing stuff like the homeless that type loneliness is tuff Fun is tragic if done by magic wonder can a fairy godmother Do a Cinderella for this tender fella girl marry an odd brother I live corrupt and fiery give up entirely abandons hope now Make random notes to myself end up rhyming dope somehow All my art scarred but still end up on hallmark cards, stressing On course lessens the force abate pain educate brain addressing The Source Magazine, erases abbreviations or faces deviations Can’t understand quotes my plan promotes funk and appreciation With verbal persuasion, renounce power of kings, bounce and tower With bling even flower blooms bring sweet smell to streets of hell |
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08-12-04, 02:15 PM | #2 | |||||
Bonecrushing Nigga
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IP: 6B29 12E8
nice overall
the way i see it it doesnt really match your title its ok thought i liked it 7/10
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08-12-04, 03:07 PM | #4 | |||||
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Lol, that describes his peice. just a bunch of random notes. you have to make sense when you make a song. next time, put a topic together, and stay on that 1 topic. peice.
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08-12-04, 04:21 PM | #5 | ||||||
Middle Weight
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Thanks To Everyone For The Props And Critique Not Perfect Just Try To Be
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