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08-17-04, 11:17 PM
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not a problem by ProVerse****i'm 2mD on original, so this isnt biting
IP: C1DA C961
i didnt get no feedback on orignal
so im posting the open mic here tell me what yaw'll think  not my problem, by: ProVerse all of us have seen em'
have you seen me posted on the wal-mart exits you have a brief moment of sadness but it quickly passes it isn't your problem u say, so you jus exhale break-away from it and move on with your day but, for the parents, that i can't say while we're complaining about battles those families at home they stay, knees clinched by there bed as they pray but its a sad thought, but yet so ovious,and its hurtin she's been gone for 2 years, odds are she's not returnin you know n your heart, she's not showin but whats worse then that is she being in danger and u not knowin they suffer, but its not our problem.... ************************************************** *** (chorus) ignore the screams its probably kids playin but as the world seems its probably a kid layin if it is, nothin of concern its not your family dude so why should you have to move.... ************************************************** **** my pops was another story, another source everytime he'd hear yellin he rushes to the porch but he soon collapsed and quit tryin to help the sad truth of his cousins being stabbed and his mind spinin thinkin of the pain that they felt police say there was many witneses and one videotaped the murder on cam and yet no one even the camerman lent a hand i guess it wasn't there problem, they only think of bills both dollar and eletric both got a grib on human wills but your thoughts change when u see how the pain conects because the 3rd and final verse explains the chain effect.... ************************************************** ***** (chorus) ignore the screams its probably kids playin but as the world seems its probably a kid layin if it is, nothin of concern its not your family dude so why should you have to move.... ************************************************** ***** 1st a rape and kill happens then the rape game becomes rapid and you know the police lackin,lackin in caring only care of if weed is being bearing next a not-so-known family member is a victom so now your eyes are open to listen still not really alert to the magnitude of the situation following that its your daughter, she's now missin for years since 2003 you been waiting by the phone drenched with tears start making notices and posting around town being smart finally you realize it's that its on the floor next to the same girl you tossed out on the wall of wal-mart..... pleaaaase gime some feedback!!!!! ~1~
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08-18-04, 05:52 AM
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nice the structure was ill
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08-18-04, 09:50 PM
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IP: C1DA C961
^^^thanx mayn for the feedback
lookin for more..... took a lil while writin dis on paper
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08-18-04, 11:55 PM
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SOMEBDY pleeeeeeeaaaaaaaaaaaaaaase leave sum feedback damn
all u have to do is say good or bad and yaw can't even do that? if a mod here close this
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08-19-04, 06:07 AM
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IP: 5043 32F4
umm to be honest and dont get mad t was wack you had short vocab elavate 2/10
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