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6 - 10 Lines
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Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 08-21-04 at 12:02 PM

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THUGLIFEOUTLAW has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-18-04 12:03 PM.

YuNg_GuN has ACCEPTED this battle on 08-18-04 12:09 PM.

you aint no mutha fuckin thug you fuckin maggot
you dont kno the first thing bout thug you faggot
you in a bad position when you fuckin challeng me
once you spit and fail you gonna have to deal wit me
you aint gonna beat me and you aint gonna go free
0-3 i got 0-0 but i'm betta then yo fuckin ass
if you do good and i still wont let you pass
your new to rv and i'm a flywieght you suck
you aint gonna catch up to me so you should duck
you ignorant bitch you should give up the game
be fore you mutha fuckin name is put to shame
i'll take you from your mutha fuckin family frame
you quitin is good but you'll suck jus the same

my lyrics r like a glock easy to cock but hard to knock//
you fuck around with me dawg your bound to get shot//
my style is like fire it'll burn ur ass faster than i burn my grass//
all i gots to do is pop off some shots and feel ur ass wit brass//
this cat thinks he's hard, but your to "YOUNG" to play with "GUNS"//
Shit, your not even on my level, i'm just battling you for fun//
you know what? fuck this battle, let me go put up my paddle//
My rhymes blasted u in da head and made ur brains raddle//
Looks to me that your just another failure from bronx new york,
a yo, this cat started the "beef" but i ate it up as if it was pork//
I just now laid out this dork, now all i needa do is go put up my fork//

aight could you help me out

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BigBootyChick

Voted For: YuNg_GuN

v/ yung_gun

nice flow...structure was kinda choppy, but overall you took this

yeah lyrical plz

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BigBootyChick

Voted For: THUGLIFEOUTLAW

both need to elevate fah real no real metahs or decent wordplay or multies attempted personals none really that hard hitting... try the tutorials guys they could help alot ....
no hate just call it like i see it but thug came more complex he at least tried tah get wordplay and multies though they were weak he tried tah build a verse with all the components
yung your verse was generic seems like you didn't try that hard to deliver good material but tried harder tah get mother fuckah in there as many times as you could....try tah lose the language and add content swearing doesn't neccesary make a verse bettah or make i rapper harder even though everyone swears once and a while try to use metaphors both of yah...
tutorials check them out....
stay up stay active and VOTE often...

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DaTruth29 [~*Lady Fiya*~] shake-spear Trooper Nova

Voted For: THUGLIFEOUTLAW

Pretty good battle, big ups to both of yall. I thought Thuglifeoutlaw came out a little bit harder, his punches were more creative, and he tried to get personal with it. Pretty decent flow was kept thru his verse as well, making it easy to read.

Yung_Gun the faggot lines are long since played out, you need to come up with something more creative to be competitive. I noticed you tried to get personal with the 0-3 line but it just wasnt hard enough. One thing is you did have a good flow also which helped you some. you just didnt come hard enough to win.

Voted For: THUGLIFEOUTLAW

Opener:Yung Gun- Cause TLO was about self-glorifcation
Closer: TLO- both was bad but TLO took dis
Multies: None- didnt see any
Punches: TLO- better punches that hit harder

v/TLO

Voted For: YuNg_GuN

cold this man was jappin good personals ad\nd cold punchlines

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