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No ones gonna stop me

watch me murder dis bitch

Dis nigga cant write his own flow so he copy n paste/
we go around sayin dat he suck dis nigga say dat we hatin/
u say u regulate, but u ain't Warren G/
u 'bout to lose the bet u made, so don't even try warnin' me/
son, i heard ya got caught masterbatin ta Nsync/
u say dats da only way u can write rhymes cus dey make u think/
maybe ya could ryhme betta if ya take dat dick out ya mouth/
Speakin' of beatings, you gettin' one like rodney king wen he commited dat crime/
what the hell were you thinking when you submitted a non-rhyme?/
u must feel so bad threatning me online/
You still suck even if you can manage to make your 3rd grade vocabulary rhyme/
you cleared out ya rhyme book? you call that an attack?/
you stole all your rhymes, crook, from the Cat in the Hat/

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No ones gonna stop me

dis bitch a fukin no show who want it now

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No ones gonna stop me

a no show, please i was getting off work when you laid that bullshit. i'm take it easy on ya though. it's for o'clock in maryland and i'll be on for the next 7 hours i get off at 11. who ever wants it get at me before 10:30 eatern standard time.


why you think i'd be scared to respond/ your verse caused no harm/
i don't know why you think you're the bomb/ when you're so easy to disarm/

maybe you did cause some damage/ a self inflicted wound is all that you managed/
laying that verse, you put the noose around your own neck/ you're the blame or your own death/

this is a foolish act of bravery or a suicide attempt/
the nigga is way over his head like a rescuer that can't swim/

now watch your ass get smashed/ like an ill fated cars crash/
your bodily mass/ would be like broken glass/ all over the dash/

you claim that you're better than me, when are the lies gonna stop/
your words carry no weight like a scale with nothing on top/

you defeating me is slimmer than the eyes on a chink/
i'll blow your brains off on your man, so he can see how you think/

your simplistic wordplay is killing me/ you need to log off, reboot your memory/
or download my signature endorsed software to better yourself lyrically/

you might as well hop into this glad bag now, cause nigga you're straight trash/
like a nigga going raw from behind, lil nae, you're straight ass/

you'll get tossed in the dark with feelngs that all is lost/
you won't survive a war with me like jews in the holocaust/

you, demolish, youngenvy, you all are soft/
you all are marks/ sweet and edible like AL LA CARTE/

i'm bout it while you all are talk/
instead of purchasing a computer, a lil skill is what you oughta brought/

Structure: PROP
Flow: PROP
Creativity: LilNae
Punches: PROP
Personals: Neither
Character: PROP!!!

Vote: PROP ....

Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. - strobe

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can we get somemore votes

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No ones gonna stop me

aight heres da rundown

open: prop
close: lil nae
personals: prop
metas: prop
punches: prop
multis: i gues lil nae

voterop

nothing personal...never is

2-0 my way. can we get some more votes, please? tryna finish this shit.

lil nae - ur punches r indirect...try usin personals to get more direct punches....stretched lines fucked up your flow n structure....try to make ur lines close to the same length...ur closer was the only good part of your verse........
Pro - u didnt even have to come as hard as u did but u merked him......you had the structure goin n that helped ya flow....u had direct punches but no personals....try to werk on usin personals
aight my vote is for pro
return the favor
http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=117820

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That Old School Mother Fucker

Aint That A Bitch?

Crhyme Sindicate

we still have a battle here can someone vote? please!!

iight, heres the breakdown, the start of the rhyme went to lil nae, but as the rhyme progressed prop got more into it and plus lil nae's barely ever rhymed the right way therefore....


voterop

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check the breakdown

Lil Nae, nice verse some creativity but alot of it didnt flow to me like the first two lines which were pretty weak you gotta hitem up wit somptin bad ass so you catch my attention right off, there were a few good punches that could have been worded better but overall not to shabby

props..yo props man nice battle, yor struc worked for ya so thats good all ur bars had somewhat of a punch they were played but still creative, use of vocab was also a plus and ur multis were also good, overall you took this one

Vote Props hit up my battle wit kuniva link in da sig

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5-0 my way battle over. thanks fellas ya'll need me to vote on ya'll shit hit me up.