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08-25-04, 05:54 AM | #1 | |||||||
~Mr. Punch-Lines~
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Quick freestyle to be honest im not realy feelin it
IP: 5043 32F4
Well now that its all over with im gonna be needin/
A bat so I can hit you with it, you’ll be bleedin/. Man yer not hot you’ve been feedin off my shit/ So stop before I hafe to merk you to make you quit/. Me n yer gurl up on the spot of the boogie down/ You see me n her getting frisky who new you broke out with a frown/. That’s what happens when you feed off (B-R-O-T-H-A-P-A-R-A)/(spelled out) Me and only me will be the one to drop you down anyway/. I spit out harder punches everytime we battle/ So dont get scared cuz im gonna be up with the fame moven into seattle/. Now I’ll be the one stealin you’re bitchs cuz that’s how I roll/ Don’t talk to me like you know the shits a deal cuz you remind me of a troll/. Now listen ill be up not back on the lows/ Cuz im down with your bitches and hoes/. I could take them with ease drop you down with some breeze/ You would be down on yer knees, and cryin becuz I made you freeze/. Now here we go to the slice board to chop some head/ Your out headless bleedin now your dead/. |
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08-25-04, 01:29 PM | #2 | |||||||
~Mr. Punch-Lines~
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IP: 5043 32F4
yo uppin this shit
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08-25-04, 01:50 PM | #3 | |||
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IP: 07E0 A9F2
Work on
structure make it more realistic like you were really rapping Vocab.. is too basic.. add a few fancy word's in.. but dont try being a nerd. Multi's increase your flow sometime's put a few of them .. and rhyme scheme It was`nt worth reading 4/10.
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08-25-04, 07:47 PM | #4 | |||||||
~Mr. Punch-Lines~
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IP: 5043 32F4
^what are multi's? can you help me with them?
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