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Old 08-30-04, 05:47 AM   #1
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Let's Dance

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Let's Dance

Some say a kiss holds the key to a heart.
That the lips are the brushes,
That love is the art.

Then some might say holding their loved ones is it.
That the winding around,
Sparks up heat like matchsticks.

And some would suggest that the eyes are the key.
That the deep gazing pupils,
Appear blue as the sea.

But I dare say dancing is the truest of loves.
Both shadows in rhythm,
Like the wings of a dove.

Holds the beauty and grace of two souls intertwined.
Silent communication,
A connection of minds.

So lets dance 'till the moon fills the sky up with light.
Let move together silently,
And dance all night.
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Old 08-30-04, 11:50 AM   #2
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I thought this was a cool piece...nice that you kept the stanza's the same...with beats and length...it was very nice. Sometimes I thought it sounded...a little..forced...kind of I dont know, like it didnt flow that good...like...kiddish...uhm...yeah, but overall it was really nice!
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Old 08-31-04, 06:22 PM   #3
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this had a nice flow to it, reminded me of a song, not any particular song but it had a sort of melody to it, <<<wonders if you write songs>>, well either way, you have a way of describing thoughts using little space, which i think is talent, nice job
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Old 08-31-04, 11:42 PM   #4
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reall good flow, touching llol....Good job!
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Old 09-01-04, 12:01 AM   #5
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very very very nice poetry....you make it sound great
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