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Check in by: 09-27-04 at 02:11 AM

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Street poet has ACCEPTED this battle on 09-27-04 01:42 AM.

VALOR has ACCEPTED this battle on 09-27-04 01:45 AM.

With ya "manicured hands" everything ya write with the pen is "gay flows"//
This "vegetarian" says he "cooks and eats beef", when really all he do is "peel potatoes"//

I’ll help you "express ya mind" after I slice open ya skull and "open it"//
”After u lose”, it’s with ya brain you’ll have a "bone to pick", so ill put ya "pelvic-bones-in-it"//

VALOR becomin an mc?? lol i didn’t know that "fags write"//
Ya "image" dont threaten me, your in "pladded skirts" rappin to sounds of "bag pipes"//

He wanted to be empowered with my "hotness", so I threw him out in "orbit"//
This “O-G” felt the "heat from the sun" and "disintegrated" as my force forced him towards-it//

Like "loose pipes", ill "tighten ya lungs", "squeeze ya neck region" till u "stop breathin"//
Before he dies, I’ll make this weakling feel more "pain" than "babies re-teething"//

"wack and lodown" are more "related" than "poles and dancers"// ( he is and does both )
I "irritate this homer", like i was "flanders" with my "foot in ya ass" like "colon-cancer"//

I’m gonna need "ten body bags" after I "rip Lodown and 'DC' in half"//
You failed to pull a "death defyin stunt facin me, like "Johnny Knoxville", so I can say I "ripped-this-jackass"//

Don't know why you came My-Way, I'm-killin-you, "SEE..."//
Fuck winnin this battle, you couldn't get "through-the-wire", if u had kaynewest cd "//


I CALLED HIM O-G BECUZ HE HAVENT BEEN ON DA SITE BUT HE IS STILL ILL-OLD GANGSTA LOL

LOW DOWN BECUZ HE ALWAYS ON DA LOW NEVA BE ON DA SITE.....

HERES MY WACK VERSE...IM KINDA RUSTY
OH WELL IM MOSTLY POETRY NOW

Ever since you read my poems you tryed to be like me
The dopeness you wanted ..so you started writing poetry
If you want to be dope as me....you best get your structure re-alined
Because coming with shit like that you will never live up to dopness defined
Keep in mind...you have shitty rymes and you do know it
Should of known after you wrote Ocean Blues-Poet
Never woulda belived that you can get a worst name then xXTOXICXxVERBZXx
Im hitting you with hard punches full of violent slurs
Listen to my words...i swear merking you is my pleasure
After this im going to whore your alias Drastic Measurez

Voted For: Street poet

one sided battle

Street Poet: Multi-city and they were hot to, hot meta's, good flow, good structure, good personals, hot punches, hot closer, hot opener. 9.5/10


Valor: U a vet u susspose to win even if ya rusty, seen better from u, good personals, not really any meta's, structure was off which through ya flow off somewhat, a few meta's, punches weren't really hitting, ok opener, good closer.
5.10

valor get back to the old u


vote: Street Poet


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Voted For: Street poet

Well all in all this was a very close battle on one hand you got Valor with his personals and on the other you have Poet with punches and more of them (cause his was 16 lines as to Valors 10) The first read through these I found Poets really tough to get through.


Poet when "you" "do" "this" I think it breaks up the flow, there is no use in over emphasising words when they don't need to be. The bolding words tecnique works and so does "this" but try and use it just when it's appropriate, cause when ya break up the flow it's tougher to get through and can have an effect on the delivery of your punches. As well I see that you are doing this // at the end of your bars, I don't really have a problem with that or the space between bars but have you tried it straight up with no spaces and without the //? Cause I think you might get a good response. Your punches are on target and your creativity with them shows you have lots of potential. Your mulit's are better than most, and I think when you develop them you could be merking alot of people on this site.

Valor, as I mentioned to you earlier you would have taken this battle if you even had 1 or 2 more bars, your personals where better than his but he surpassed you with content and punches. Normally personals and punches win battles, over flow, over mettas over multi's but in this case his punches were on target and he had a few more of them. Don't get me wrong this is a very close battle I would expect the voting to go right down to the wire 4-4 before a winner is ecided and I hope it does cause this battle is almost to close to call. You guys should battle again, and no offence Poet but if he had dropped a few more bars this would be one sided so bring ya A game!!!


I'll talk to ya later bout some stuff.

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Voted For: Street poet

yo man i think poet killed it man. he had a real good flow n jus killed it wit the vocvab n punches. he also had sum good personals in there. he came hard man.

vote=streetpoet

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i aint gonna vote cuz ya its to hard to decide lol