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07-03-02, 06:30 PM
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~Something to Leave you With~
IP: 72DB 7245
hey, this uh, isnt' going to be that easy tho it's been easy to sleep........Im gonna be leaving Rapbattles after the tournies over I think........so Diamond im still gonna be checkin in for that.....so....with that said....lemme say this...to my fam memebers......
first off......Diamond-girl you inspire me n' im still see you around at 411 and shit...always gonna be one of my idols here..keep shit real.... Malb-Im still gonna talk to you...and we will eventually finish that collab....mwah.... Soulstress-ah, wat to say about you,ehe.. another one of my idols....your shit keeps my mind thinking....dont ever change your style... perephial---how ever u spell ur new name...girl u kick ass...dont change either...always writing beautiful pieces darneck--ooo...using ur old name....only cuz i cant spell the other one....you are my top male idol here....inspiration to me definitly ahh........those are the top 5 i wanted to say special stuff to...the rest.... assasin,monkeypoet,infinitemind,hazy,uh,wisdomenta l,all of you...the talent.......you guys are talented people...dont ever let go of that....... ESP...i love you guys...sorry......i fell....cant keep on with it here's my last piece ill be posting(other than the tournie)... One tear Ive ever cried has had some symbol when a part of me has died The everlasting sorrow inside only hides for so long before appearing These pieces of me that fall silenty while the rest of the world is snearing Two tears for each awakening that I thought I had already had A part to reach out in a way to say sorry but at the same time hold on...it makes me so sad Water punching the ground like it would really make a difference Holding each memory they ever were involved in the past tense Three tears for falling behind and not having the courage to say I was in trouble Never being the strong type to admit anything but to stay subtle For sending out cries that I knew would never be answered..but I still tried To make what is wrong only seem right when the time comes to make them hide Four tears fall when the day is over when I begin to see When the sun leaves the earth alone cuz its done enough damage to let me be Not certain why I must be punished when I have never wronged But still the drops fall out like the dont want to belong Five tears for all the years I was told I would be nothing To be able to look a child in the eye and tell them anything that wasnt true as long as it was something The stains on my pillow from pretending everything was alright for not being able to tell what was wrong and what was suppose to be right Six tears repersenting how many times I was beaten in and out of love Apologizes stacked up trying to make it seem like they were always above Trying to fix broken promises but getting frustrated and giving up When you feel like you cant protect yourself so you just let them have what they want b/c you cant act tough Seven tears falling after lonley years Never trusting one individual because you can only live in fear For reaching out and never getting a hand in yours Succeeding only in what goes on behind closed doors Eight tears that fall because you cant hold them in because there has to be more to life than letting others win for holding on and then letting go before you know why the nights that you stare out the window and wonder if someone is in the sky Nine tears scattered and blurring the vision you hold dear For closed minds and open mouths of disaproving peers The lost hopes that someday everything will make life worth living That there really is a promised outcome to giving Ten Tears making my face feel like I cant survive For the ruffled sheets in which your screamed and yelled and took me before I could realize tears falling back on me because of something you felt you were privilaged to You say they will stop coming but in reality the tears will never stop falling and painfully enough....neither will you one love  |
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07-06-02, 08:17 AM
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IP: F8DE F595
damn...well you will be missed....guess you gotta do what you gotta do....its all good...
as for your piece...the first stanza hit me the hardest....but really..all the way through it had emotions pure and strong...i really felt how you 'symbolized' the tears...how you put them in relation to why you shed them....this was a great piece to 'go out' on...it says it all about you....capturing the pure essence of what you are trying to say..... ...good luck...and au revoir.... - life has many an obstacle, it is for you to negotiate your way past them, whether on your own, or with the help of friends/family...you shall come out a better n more stronger person....as long as you turn the negativity into positivity... - .... |
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