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Old 09-27-04, 03:59 PM   #1
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In a Box {On The Inside}

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Through life's complications i think of all the nonsense i've been through
Only consolation prizes because my conscience has issues
All combinations of lies are told to me and my accomplises from you
Critical observations speak limitations and constant abuse
Why reminise on past love stories that gave me pain and confusion
Every time my heart feels something, the mind says it's an illusion
To many people's amusement I slip, fall, and struggle to my feet
Either friends, foes, or family can bring reminders of past defeats
I'm no longer complete, losing each and every warm feeling inside
Pretending that i'm happy but could really care less if i die
Keep confessions disguised knowing soon that my heart will dissenigrate
All suggestions denied because to me i have a clearer fate
Hear my ventalations through visual aids like expressions on my face
I fear my hesitations of physical pain, it is myself i have disgraced
This missplaced sanity and hidden feelings complete the entire package of this humorless time
Bringing forth damaging healings of bleeding are the actions of this Persons mind
Will i find or be found in the near future's trials and tribulations?
Will i save or be saved in the near future's long depressing situations?
Your visitations are unwanted, when you come it's rain in my eyes
Don't they understand that my face doesn't get wet when i cry?
Being blind and not seeing are two completely different things
And on the inside i don't let one single person see the pain that with in
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Old 09-27-04, 10:09 PM   #2
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beautiful, thats all i gotta say, i feel this poem, the emotion is so true, well done once again, the best lines"why remionisce about past love stories that gave me pain and confusion", "every time my heart feels something, my mind says its an illusion", dope, and your closing 3 bars....nice shit
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Old 09-28-04, 01:43 PM   #3
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Thanks Girl

when you gonna dropp some new stuff?

You always drop nice feedback,

Peace

and Good Lookin
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Old 09-29-04, 12:10 PM   #4
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wow...thats really good..it was long but kept me interested u used big words n it was deep n it's a lot how i feel i really like it keep it up lata playa
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