this the verse of a lifetime
you like mine - fuck with me - your body's in a white line
the right time - learn to write rhymes
yearn to bite mine - you burn and might find
shits not always peaches and cream
your "fans" you might had run off when you step in the scene
im a crazy bitch - they call me kurt cobain
dont flirt with cocain - im icy with cold vains
those get merk'd with no names -
didnt need to be here anyway - too many ways
to ask what did-he-say
stupid bitches - its printed black and white
to win it you have to fight
to get it you have to write
plain to see - written its there for you
youd think theyd study - read ones here before you
but they dont - endanger loved ones who adore you
take care - shouldnt have to say i warn you
stupid bitches....really need some help
but these hustlas have no time - you gotta do it by yourself
"work on multis" and "need more punches"
but its bout the flow - youre as predictable as preschool lunches ...mother fuckers

<b>this is for all those little mother fuckers out there that think freestyling and battling is only about the punches and that bullshit. they care nothing about style and flow. to be able to formulate metaphors and similies and flow those into music and rhythmic patterns is a lot harder than a mother fucking punchline. fuck you little mother fuckers who know nothing about hip hop. hip hop is about flow and about style. freestyling was concieved by hip hop artists and fanatics. now you mother fuckers wanna take whats vital to hip hop out???? fuck you...you fuckin robots</b>

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pretty dope try and fix yer lines some are streched liek this:
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^^if you understand what i mean it takes the flow off thats not good for open mics but ya its good otherwise 6.5/10
return the favour in my open mic Pure Pressure its at the top of open mic thanks

uppin...thanks kid

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Now - exhibit, styles I kick with it
Pardon me, but I'm fuckin sickwiddit
--Big Daddy Kane

uppin

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Now - exhibit, styles I kick with it
Pardon me, but I'm fuckin sickwiddit
--Big Daddy Kane

nice man it was pretty tight and i like what u said bout the way ppl vote and view raap on here cuz its def true it is harder to make metaphors and similies and shit....over all 8/10 i liked it man nice

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.:Retired:.

its 6/5/10 not 8/10 truth

uppin for more feedback...dont sleep

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Now - exhibit, styles I kick with it
Pardon me, but I'm fuckin sickwiddit
--Big Daddy Kane

That was nice,word play and structure....that was a militant flow..sumthan diff with tha same ole sniff.

keep doin ur thing killah!

thanks coldsteel man. i try not to be like the same ol stuff. uppin this.

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Now - exhibit, styles I kick with it
Pardon me, but I'm fuckin sickwiddit
--Big Daddy Kane

it's good.....try to fix your structure so it's even all through out the verse

keep doing your thing

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uppin this for more feeds

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Now - exhibit, styles I kick with it
Pardon me, but I'm fuckin sickwiddit
--Big Daddy Kane