All verses may be ok.....This is off the top of my head.....no beef...

Do not ask us for assonance syllable help for most people do not know what you are talking about. Those who do have tried to help you, but you've either blown up on them and started doing you played disses or keep on bugging them with the same question. When you ask about multiples did you think to check OMB's tutorial. Always check tutorials here, or probably Rapbattles.com since they have been around longer.

Lets get a few of your misconceptions corrected.

1. Rapping isn't a science.......mostly its just having something that rhymes such as Tit and bit, or suck and duck together. You can get more complicated with evaluation and constipation which has more syllables.
like:
"The evaluations of segregation send hate across nations"
Hate held held like constipation, wont reciprocate Lincoln's emancipation"
BLAH!!

That is some internals, and metafours........

A metafour is saying one thing and meaning or refferring to another
like this:
kids hopeless got nothing to loose
hes seen less than Tom Cruise

Seen less and Tom Cruise being an almost midget create the punch

To do personals find something on your oppnent his signature, words hes said, or pics he's posted......and use it in your verse

"Clap this kid hard like thunder lightning bolts from God
If he rode strobe as much as Kyro He'd already be mod"
me vs Shabba

Well I complete this later

Its part of my tutorial
Rapping for Idiots

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