i was a little pissed off when i wrote this, and a little high but i think it turned out aight. tell me what ya think..

| Deepness in me |

Theres a night in everyones life where tears just fall.
you cant control your eyes, they light up like crystal balls.
emotional times, anger soon to take ova lines.
reminded of the agony, soon there which happened to me.
A heartache I couldnt take, A life that I couldn't make.
Lost my wife and my kids for goodness sake.

Depression, confessions, tha deepness in me,
Aggression, Profession, noone sees what i see.
Obsession, Discretion, dey just outcast me.
Oppression, Progression, still dey think, dey can outlast me.
i guess its just the deepness in me.

Stupid thoughts and acts fo` one to regret,
dont realize the pain until it sets.
only thing niggas care for today, is a niggas rep.
gotta vent da anger, stanglin' strangers dont care about the danger.
i try to get mines, but im like a dog in the manger.

Depression, confessions, tha deepness in me,
Aggression, Profession, noone sees what i see.
Obsession, Discretion, dey just outcast me.
Oppression, Progression, still dey think, dey can outlast me.
i guess its just the deepness in me.

Try and pull me in line, try and get me straight,
i`ll just sit here and laugh at every comment you make,
im never out fa tha give, always out fa the take.
maybe dats why im goin crazy, ive made so many mistakes.
anger mounted up to the seizmic equasion of a quake.
the devil laid a trap, and i took the bait.

Depression, confessions, tha deepness in me,
Aggression, Profession, noone sees what i see.
Obsession, Discretion, they just outcast me.
Oppression, Progression, still dey think, dey can outlast me.
i guess its just the deepness in me.

nobodys there just when im in need.
lost and confused an adolescent indeed.
so im fallin to tha ground, darkest shadows surround me.
hands cup my head, lonely crys and pleas are all i hear around me.

Depression, confessions, tha deepness in me,
Aggression, Profession, noone sees what i see.
Obsession, Discretion, dey just outcast me.
Oppression, Progression, still dey think, dey can outlast me.
i guess its just the deepness in me.

And time pass`s, shit still tha same no matter what u do,
in tha same game peeps playin on peeps wit no clue.
from anger and danger, just a bunch of concerns.
seems nothing comes from a broken heart, no one learns.
anything new just how to play, they just come harder ,
but wid tha kuruption of two, they`ll just barder,
just makin life and love so much harder.

Depression, confessions, tha deepness in me,
Aggression, Profession, noone sees what i see.
Obsession, Discretion, dey just outcast me.
Oppression, Progression, still dey think, dey can outlast me.
i guess its just the deepness in me.

Remember to love what you hold, Never unfold.
Stand forever bold, And maybe one day you'll behold,
The key to the gates, To stand amongst the greats.
With your loved ones at hand, At this time, Heaven will expand.

Depression, confessions, tha deepness in me,
Aggression, Profession, noone sees what i see.
Obsession, Discretion, dey just outcast me.
Oppression, Progression, still dey think, dey can outlast me.
i guess its just the deepness in me.

^^^^^^^^^^ uppin

da shiz was koo man def inatly keep postin sorry i aint qoutin tho im tired and im trying to get some one to peepe im back(bitch)..please

thanks dawg.. uppin^^

This was a deep piece man, quite solid in places, very meaningful though and you showed your emotions well... The flow was sturdy, I think your multies shone through, but more internal rhymes woulda made this a winner... The vocab was quite balanced, a lot of words were repeated though, otherwise from that it was nicely used, kept a good range throughout... Didnt like how the same "hook" was repeated after everything, wordplay was aight, it was working sometimes with the similes, metaphors coulda given it a deeper sense, but I liked the realism in this piece, it was mos def a decent read... Keep elevating and spitting...

Peez...

dis was a deep soul piece-----walked in a stranger----walked out---seein sumpin maybe u hadnt intended on bein seen---"cleanin out ya closet"
anyway-dis was nice--------im guessin the comin soon means-we gonna get to hear it audio------
i await the day-
smooth-heartfelt-rhyme---
words of inner strength-sadness and life--
madlove always---c.