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11-13-04, 06:31 PM
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Very rough spit - unknown fources
IP: 3450 F354
dis spit is realli rough, on me writers block,,,,,, im findin it harder ta rap lol for sum reason plz dnt h8
if anyone knows how ta cure writers block plz holla bak at: angel_t_000@hotmail.com if u hate or like dis spit lemme know why (structure/flow/ryme etc) insted of say str8 dat iz wak........... das da onli way i can elevate -- GET ME-- Note dis topic is just a like unknown topic (unknown fources) Collabaration of the 2 biggest fources // Swiftly serge like bedouins with their horses // Unpredictable dark egotistical sources // Anilation in their hearts - 2 vengful fources // Prey and attack on the weak and fourceless // Facade what the truth lies, Deafeat the remourceless // Paralyse skies with vengful eyes in distress // No depth of peace - Courage put to the test//
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11-13-04, 09:50 PM
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IP: 3AF9 7567
heh aight i didnt understand what you were trying to get at...you had nice multis but i dont understand where the direction was going, u need to create a clearer picture dawgz...
an you should match barz... Collabaration of the 2 biggest fources // Swiftly serge like bedouins with their horses // Unpredictable dark egotistical sources // Anilation in their hearts - 2 vengful fources // Prey and attack on the weak and fourceless // Facade what the truth lies, Deafeat the remourceless // ^^^Thats 6 lines with the ryhme words then u end it with 2 diffrent ryming lines...i would try to even up a little the barz...its sounds more attractive that way Ya strength lie in mulits the lines did flow u just need a little work to get out of your funk...try listening to ya favorite rapper an get some inspiration aight dawgs ONE
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