Yo yo yo yo yo

Im next to be dat so called best emcee
dat leave da rest of dese emcees in West Indies
lettin dese emcees rest in peace
cause in West Indies, they say Im da best indeed
Im tired of dese fake niggas askin for a lesson please
but den change dey mind right before dat weapon squeeze
Dey sweatin cheese cause dey chedda weighs less than me
and dey some punks, cause all they do is step and leave
So basically,before ya start mistaken me
Im only here to eliminate fakes to be
Face it B, you'se just a fake emcee
ya label'll fire ya and you get replaced wit me

Young mix

Ayo I need dat feedback man
If ya do, Ill try to return da favor

Young mix

aiyo it waz iight for a freestyle but u kinda kept using the same words
but decent drop....peep my freestyle is called bored...one

Ayo thanx Optikal
I need more feedback/uppppiiiiinnnnnnnn

Young mix

ok, this isnt good. What I mean by that is your thrying to push the slang to much.It's a text peice,text slang is wak. Try writing shit correctly with proper grammar,blaH.

you have some multi's in it,but they are not the best and seem forced in place's.
overall you need to make yoru whole peice longer, find a better topic. put more heart into it.

Aight then
more feedback
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Young mix

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Young Mix

I wont hurt ya
just gimme more feedback

Young Mix

Young... accept my battle and drop your verse...
That freestyle was alrite.,...

More feedback on dis shit
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Young Mix

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