Verse 1:
Capture imagery painted with words
Playing with emotions like I play with words
Develop a picture of a thousand words
Release them freely like trapped caged birds
Observe them crashing through skies
Landing in ears n minds its no surprise
That demise of time is near, lend me your ears
Like van gogh, artistic lyrical poetry appears
Condoms for minds because I’m fuking your brain
Fucking insane, soldier fighting for the wrong cause
Like Saddam Hussein, I deserve applause
If not I’m taking your fucking hands off
Like you were caught stealing in Saudi Arabia
Shine bright, I’m a holder of light like a chandelier
Your time ends now I stole your future
People fuking you from all angles like Kama Sutra
Loaded cocked and ready, got to keep my pen in a holster
My rhymes drop with sickness twist and turns like child molesters
Falling to death from a roller coaster

Verse 2:
Poetry in motion as I be reciting these words
Holographic rhythmic calligraphic words
Geographic concepts put my place on this earth
Rebirth everyday I never grow old or go old
Stay stimulating minds with simulating rhymes
Stepping to me? Pointless like your broken pencil
No wonder you write no lines, I stay suspenseful
Infinite intense immense defences you cause pretences
Bruce Willis sixth sense? Yea I’m seeing dead people
Hanging from church steeples, raped, murdered, stoned
Not from drugs but Jesus style, I can see them alone and disowned
They black Africans in Sudan women and children killed, genocide
Homicide 187 murdered in thousands, fuck the government troops
Allied with janjaweed militia groups and if the shit don’t loop
I’m going to repeat it, genocide Homicide 187 murdered in thousands
Fuck the government troops allied with janjaweed militia groups
Systematic rape women trying to escape, monsters burning villages
Blood spillages if blood were water there would be no more droughts
Massacres still continue no one hears the burning children shouts
And I doubt there will ever be peace, cease the deaths
Or there will be none of us left

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This was actually pretty dope.. i was gonna hate on the structure but as i read it i started to feel the structure a little more... the imagery was good.. vocab was flawless... some multies in there worked good for you other didnt... decent wordplay.. good depth and emotion solid piece 8/10

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RV's Only 3 Time Topical Tourney Champion

ey yo i gotta go wit MAG and give u a 8/10...juss
cause ya srutca thoguh but it was still tight

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thanxs homies
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"Condoms for minds because I’m fuking your brain
Fucking insane"<----------Dope line

"Your time ends now I stole your future
People fuking you from all angles like Kama Sutra"<------HAHA dope

"Release them freely like trapped caged birds"<----- trapped and caged generally mean the same thing, that kinda fucked your flow up......

the second verse was aight diff. from the first........i liked it overall it was a good piece with some good witt and some seriously graphic lines.....keep that up peace!

thanxs man
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Overall Good Drop.vocab Was Gr8 And The Structure Worked For U.emotion Was Good And I Was Definately Feelin' Thee Imagery.8.5/10........keep Em Comin'

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I'm like CHUCKy dyin' to live in the flesh free of the BATTERY,
ASSAULT n ROBBERY rapidly,wishin' cupid would clap at me
N lift this evil spell so I can experience happilly evil backwards-see(down there)
EVIL............backwards =............LIVE

thanxs man
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was pretty good, liked the flow (except for the opener rhyming word with word with word)... any way was pretty good

thanxs man! uppin for more feed!

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uppin!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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