I was writing this for week 4, but I realized it was closed so this is what i wrote:

In my office drinkin' tea as i heard the knock on the door/
It's a nurse says there is a patient dyin' on the floor/
So I run to him and I see his Spinal cord is showin'/
I asked how did it happen, he said all from skate boardin'/
It's late, 4 in the mornin', I was in my office yawnin'/
But now i gotta operate on this bastard/
His back is shattered so for that matter/
I must put him to sleep, grabbed my loupe(magnifyin' glass) cause were goin' in too deep/
Nurse hand me the chopper, I gotta cut him open/
Reattach his fuckin' cord before he starts provoking/
And starts dieyin' cause mom's in the lounge cryin'/
Put the lights over his body, I can't see shit you stupid nurse/
Give me a fuckin' hand and quite worryin' about your fuckin' purse/
Aight now we got to sew his back/
Give me the needle this kid is see threw/
O shit I think I saw his feet move/
Anyway halfway done with the stitchin'/
I'm sweatin' these nurses keep bitchin'/
One gave me head the other day/
The other one is shy by the way/
Damn I'm zonin' out, Gotta stay focus/
How can I, this shit is so bogus/
Wow were done with the surgery/
Now turn him around and get him out this misery/
What the fuck is up with his eyes/
*He's not breathin' doctor*
O shit he's dead, call his dad, tell him your son's in a body bag/
Arrange a funural, your son needs alot of rest/
May god rest his soul, poor kid all he wanted to do is skate board/

it can be a open mic piece but does count in the piece of the week

So I run to him and I see his Spinal cord is showin'/
I asked how did it happen, he said all from skate boardin'/
It's late, 4 in the mornin', I was in my office yawnin'/


Nurse hand me the chopper, I gotta cut him open/
Reattach his fuckin' cord before he starts provoking/
And starts dieyin' cause mom's in the lounge cryin'/
Put the lights over his body, I can't see shit you stupid nurse/
Give me a fuckin' hand and quite worryin' about your fuckin' purse/



O shit he's dead, call his dad, tell him your son's in a body bag/
Arrange a funural, your son needs alot of rest/
May god rest his soul, poor kid all he wanted to do is skate board/




haha cuzz came wit some ILL shit storyline type shit. like tha story spitz and this shit was well executed. ILL drop cuzz keep dat shit up.





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^^good look, uppin'

Uppin'^^^^

same hot shit as usual kid. storyline was tight, good way of flowin', good idea. vocab. was on point. mad skillz, much props.

great drop kid!
ill flow good topic1
keep it up

<<<<<Gives money bags $100
*money bags jumps for joy

thanx yall^^^^LOL

f this was hot as always man, whenever i read ya shit i never disapointed, good topic, nice storytelling what not, good vocab, keep it ups

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^^no doubt....uppin'...

nice drop .... i liked the concept of it..

flowed aiight..

keep it comin....

nice flow kid i liked the story line that shit sbout the nurse given you head was funny....

Uppin'..

i read this once, but 4got to reply, my bad,
on the real, this shit is dope

So I run to him and I see his Spinal cord is showin'/
I asked how did it happen, he said all from skate boardin'/
It's late, 4 in the mornin', I was in my office yawnin'/


Nurse hand me the chopper, I gotta cut him open/
Reattach his fuckin' cord before he starts provoking/
And starts dieyin' cause mom's in the lounge cryin'/
Put the lights over his body, I can't see shit you stupid nurse/
Give me a fuckin' hand and quite worryin' about your fuckin' purse/


that shit was ill as fuck yo
good topic good overall spit

holla back

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