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12-07-04, 06:07 PM | #1 | ||||
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The Rivalry
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this is a free verse poem i did for english class...hope u like it
The Rivalry By ~High-Dro~ Is it my city? Or yours? Fights over turf, Scraps because of money, Reputations to protect, Everyone has to be so tough. Chaos spreads because of one simple sound, Innocent bystanders flee from fear of the bullets. Lives hang in the balance. Hot lead penetrates skin. Victims are scarred for life. Mentally and physically. Houses become broken homes, Rooms become vacant. They match the empty hearts. The silence is so un-nerving. Tears roll down flushed cheeks. The family is torn apart. These are the streets. This is the struggle. Gang warfare is a killer. It’s red versus blue. It’s Bloods versus Crips. This is The Rivalry.
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12-07-04, 06:11 PM | #2 | ||||||||
mess with me get cooked
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12-07-04, 06:22 PM | #3 | |||||
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whut u mean wtf?????
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12-07-04, 06:43 PM | #4 | |||||
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i can see y drastci was lik "wat tha fuck" cos of its no structure, rhymes, vocab etc...
Hoever.........................it reminded me of dem old skool poems where u c an Mc on stage jus spittin a poem to sum funky jazz 80's type accapella get me...and dats heavy.......tha topic has been played............but jus cos i liked tha style u tried ill giv it 7/10 PEace homie.....try n come moo conventional next time and elevate den try new stylez again. 1
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12-07-04, 10:07 PM | #5 | ||||
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IP: EBC9 87F2
ya it was jus free verse, thanks fa the feedback homie
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