aight i'll post my verse up soon...

no more than 10 bars (20 lines)

TOPIC: photographs (interpret that how eva tha phuqq ya want jus stick 2 tha topic - but it can b metaphorical)

NO CREW VOTES (i dont want ur dick ryders up in here)

first to 5 votes wins

3-0 vote = K.O.

good luck (you'll need it)

aight here i go...

Photographs

Wait… go deeper… ‘til i can see deep inside…
Come out 4rm behind ur mask… baby don’t hide…/
Each time I try 2 capture it u escape my grasp…
Ur conscience defeats u… ur soul starts to gasp…/
I won’t take ur last breath… jus immortalize tha pain…
Go stand outside so I can eternalize tha rain…/
Tha tears… the defenselessness an the broken heart…
The blackness that developed when our souls did part…/
Emptiness consumes u… I hope I can memorize…
beliefs… let em rise…while past wrongs sever ties…/
it’s not my ulterior motive… I don’t wanna cause torment…
I only wanna show u how u used me as a doormat…/
Open up your heart… let me photograph tha crack…
I doubt u’ll eva mend it with that knife up in ur back…/
Now I get the best picture as I watch u lose control…
I told u that it wouldn’t hurt if I photographed ur soul..//

iight

I jus found da thread.....

Gimme a bit of time....to do a battle verse against SKILLZ....
then I'll dorp in here...

Much repsect periphial for bein da only one from ya crew Wit skill and gutz...

wUn

Take a Moment Please and jus.....Freeze.....One Flash..2 seconds..Guess wut..?? 1000 memories..//
Kinda like Faith..It Was Sent To Me...
Meant to be...A time Captured Entity..//
Eventually..I got ya love in time~frames...
From Smiles..to frowns..and lovely Mind~Games..//
Thangs change like in Hell..BUT...
no matter da ugliness of it...i gotta get it developed..//
I tell you what...A Man Dies...da same time...A Soul Cries..
Like it's been said before...da beginnin and end...//
Love and Joy...Photo's of me...you and a friend...
captured in one second...and kept till da end..//
Time to seal da envelope and send...
signed and sealed...captivated da moment..Until you reveal...//
Over Whelmin woundz...dat da sight only can heal...
wether in color or not...it's always been real...//
So Please..take da next picture..So I could be wit ya ..faster...
click da button..let da moment be captured...//

iight

let's get some votez...from a poetic view..and not a battle view...

SKILL MAY NOT VOTE...OR ENTER DA THREAD...

umm about time you used your brain lmao

my vote goes to sin

yah both had nice verses

but sin verse was betta and it had betta flow and betta meanin to photographs

100

yeah i repsect u took ur time to read....and all......

But i did explain dat u couldn't vote..cuz i thought u woulda jus hated...

So I'm still not gonna count da vote...

In All Fairness to Periphial Beauty.....

uppin....

yo both were real nice topical ish right on point,
i prefered peripherals flow, couldn't really get into yours sin... but i do like how sins ending to his kinda takes you back to the beginning and also makes you feel like you've stopped time for the verse
e.g
"So Please..take da next picture..So I could be wit ya ..faster...
click da button..let da moment be captured..."

saying that i like peripherals ending, it has a kinda sweet bitter ending which i like
"Now I get the best picture as I watch u lose control…
I told u that it wouldn’t hurt if I photographed ur soul.."

Metaphorically speaking both were on point

damn this is very close but ima have to go with peripheral as i kinda got into it more.... ya both did dope tho
no wait read both again and gonna go with damn fuck it your gonna have to get someone else to vote, too close for my likings.....good shit
peazz

admn so i waisted my time damn

if i would of saw that where you say skillz may not vote i wouldnt of but i most of miss it

oh welll lmao

lol on second thoughts the whole topic is photographs and sin stopped the time liek a photo captures, so just on that im gonna give it to... sin
close shit

so no vote..??

dat's cool at least i think that's what ya sayin....
if ya vote then it's 1-0 4 peripial....
and i wouldn't hate on dat.....

she dropped dope poetry jus as well did i.....
both were dope reads.......

but is dat a vote...or a chage of mind not to vote..??
when ya reply ...
at da end of ya post...say da score along wit uppin...
saves thread cloggin...
thax

LoL

Vote = Sin

UPPINNN^^^

if u didn't wanna vote for me that's cool...

ya suposed to vote for who u really tink won...
I ain't tryna bias votez here....

i jus wanna make sure...
cuz i don't wanna rob her for a win if peepz really think she deserved it....And i think she would believe da same kinda like vice verse.........

so if ya sure dat's who u wanna vote for...then it's 1-0...
if ya jus playin make sure u say so....

yo, its good to see somethin thats different, a nice little break from readin all of the same momma jokes and dick in yo ass lines.
i wus really feelin both of yalls poems, i didnt think neone could say so much about takin a picture, im gonna go wit peripheralbeauty just cus i got into hers more, both of the endins were real tight though

FOR REAL THIS WAS A NICE DIFFERENCE. I THINK SIN'S MADE ME THINK A LITTLE MORE AND REALIZE THINGS SO MY VOTE GOES TO SIN...
BUT BOTH POEMS WERE TIGHT