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12-15-04, 02:04 PM | #1 | ||||||
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Metas out the ass...
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I’m On A Political ‘Platform’ Meaning My Views Are ‘Raised’
I Don’t Usually Act Norm Because I’m Use To Rage Life Is Like Vehicles, If You Have The ‘Will’ (Wheel) To Go On You Reach Higher Elevation ‘Steer’ Clear Of Appalling Topics Because Conversation Passes Through Interesting Locations But Through The Cracks Showcasing Light I See The Brutal Fights I Know That War Is About Who Is ‘Left’ And Not About Who Is ‘Right’ Lord Knows I’m Taking A ‘New Direction’ In Life But It Could The Wrong Turn I Try To Strive For Perfection, If Not That Wrong Turn Could Make This Song Burn Its Said That Ones Life Is ‘Ripened’ Green With Experiences So I’m Highly Mature Besides My Black Means And Appearances |
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12-15-04, 03:06 PM | #2 | ||||||
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Getting slept on eh...
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12-16-04, 08:45 AM | #3 | ||||||
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Can you say slept on?...
zzzzz zzz zzz zz |
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12-16-04, 09:08 AM | #4 | |||||
Rastafari Walk Tall
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IP: BD9E 205D
meh, nuttin special homie - but good nonetheless
structture: ok but fell off in places flow: gd lyrics:gd wordplay:gd overall - 7/10 return favour on ma battle wit realistik or 1mic<------ Peace
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12-16-04, 10:34 AM | #5 | |||
Tight.
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IP: C959 12E0
Some advice: When someone is trying to read your piece, it is much more fluent when you type it normally.
Ex. Xxxxx xxxx xxx xxx You= Xxx Xxx Xxx "Xxx' 'xxx' It makes it look odd, and can get kind of confusing. Also some advice would be to keep it fluent and on topic. |
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12-16-04, 10:39 AM | #6 | |||
Tight.
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http://community.rapverse.com/showt...054#post1820054
If you could I'd really appreciate it, it's one of the om's I dropped. |
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12-16-04, 05:42 PM | #7 | ||||||
...Jea...
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IP: 28AD 5545
^okay but not great......6.5/10
lookin at the title thought it wouldve been betta..just elevate a lil.......~1~ |
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12-16-04, 09:08 PM | #8 | ||||||
Bow Chicka Bow Wow
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IP: FEFC E273
fix structure but the first 4 lines werepretty good
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12-16-04, 11:47 PM | #9 | |||||||
Still Spectacular, Yes!
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well metas wurr nice..ha..structure wasn't bad *IN MY EYES* though the flow has seen *BETTER DAYZ*...word...
7/10 PimpThugALicious Stay Up
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