this a keystyle i wrote.....To:mom

i'm doin ok an stop slangin them rockz/
cuz i realized how i hurt u those nights when you got calls from cops/
i realized those tears running down yo eyes wasn't even close to tha pain inside/
for you i stop bustin bullets at niggaz an commin home so blowed bloodshot was color of my eyes/
all i wanted to do was take dadz place cuz he neva did provide/
it wasn't yo boyfreind it was my money i snuck in yo purse at night/
o by tha way how my lil brotha doin i hope he still not a dad cuz when he was only 6 when he was talkin bout hoez he screwin/
teach him tha right path he should be choosing/
cuz if he stay on streets those bullets will hit him like a nuclear fusion/
an i'm not mad at your choice to kick me out/
i know when i got to deep in tha game it was like baseball u had to strike me out/
did u ever picture me being succesful cuz at early age i had a foul mouth(cursed a lot)/
who ever knew a a young 16 yr ol stl boi would get signed to a label down south/(i still can't lol)
i know uncle greg so before he ask tell him on tha record i'll give him a shot out/
an since i found rap my trails an tribulations wound out/

Love,
Zack aka STeaDY V.A

vocab a bit simple and flow sumtimes went off a bit but heartfelt shit tho so im def uppin ya on that. could do wit sum work then it could be a dope as fuck piece. aight bro check any o mine

thx dawg........ i didn't put effort in vocab cuz i wanted to send simple message....uppin.......

dat wuz cool...i love people that is real...i hate fake cat's

dude that was real u shud check out my other rhyme

http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthr...&threadid=16026

checkin ur piece b/c you asked me to...its nice...i love when people rap about stuff otha then killin each other...but its nice..much luv..God bless...1..

thx ya'll uppin

nuffin expressed from soul should be put under the same test as rhymes based on ability alone---battling and rhyme form is a part of hiphop jus as much as rhymes written wit no thought other than pure heart felt expression. i am feelin this piece cus it repped an emotion u may have otherwise disregaurded into depths of self hate-------
mad love always-one-

thx uppin

you gave me a reply

so here I am to give you one

i agree with mack

it good to see rappers rap about other
things then kill-kill-kill muder-murder-murder

it was simple yes

but that's not the point..it's a letter to your mom

a well written letter in fact

just nice

-1-

nuffin expressed from soul should be put under the same test as rhymes based on ability alone---battling and rhyme form is a part of hiphop jus as much as rhymes written wit no thought other than pure heart felt expression. i am feelin this piece cus it repped an emotion u may have otherwise disregaurded into depths of self hate

^ That is strictly the troof, and if this is real, thats what im feeling, if it was something that was on your mind, and you wanted to spit it, thats iLL and heartfelt... I dont critique ish like this, keep spitting and dropping the gems, if you want it to be critiqued then holla...

Peez...

PERSONALLY I GIVE PROPS ON THIS.....SIMPLICITY IS NEEDED OFTEN TIMES TO DERIVE A MESSAGE COMPLEXITY IS BETTER MORE FOR MESSAGES THAT ARE RETORIC THIS WAS GOOD.

THis was tight lovin this one right here, can relate
very heartfelt emotionz r whoa
keep doin ur thang

i'm grateful for reply's keepuem commin thx ya'll.......