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Old 07-16-02, 02:22 PM   #1
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Lil Drop on ya'll....Keystyle

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What's up to all, nada mas aqui/
I just ask, that ya'll pray for me/
It's gettn hard, tryn to show these kids the key/
To everything, and all bout the ministry/
THen I spit, bout the real G-0-D/
They ask "you tryn to evangelize to me?"/
Digo, "si, Dios, that's what I said"/
I pray He comes and wakes you all out of bed/
Cause right now, ya'll be sleepn in sin/
But eventually, I pray ya'll become born again/
I've learned persistent prayer's the only way/
For God to invade their life, and say hey/
Why you out here, up in all this wess/
All God ask's, is that you come and confess/
The wrong things, that don't even seem that wrong/
Small as white lies, or big as King Kong/
It doesn't really matter, He'll forgive every error/
And by forgiving, He saves your soul from terror

ONE LUV YA'LL....
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Old 07-16-02, 02:36 PM   #2
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nice spit....but yo vocab was real good then u killed it with barz like....

For God to invade their life, and say hey/

elementary.....good overall tho...holla at my work 2..
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Old 07-17-02, 08:59 AM   #3
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Yeh this was looking good in the first coupla bars, deep lines and good use of vocab and then it kinda fell off towards the end... It was quite simplistic, had its moments and lines, some places you were coming deep and understanding... The rhyme scheme was aight, more internal rhymes and some sharper multies, flow didnt seem choppy though, vocab fell off towards the end, had some elements of similes... It was a decent drop, a good piece to elevate through, keep spitting...

Peez...
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