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12-30-04, 07:30 PM
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.::Outside The Circle::.
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Drug Addiction
IP: CC3D AFAC
Your Bodies Cold.. Woken up to the shivering.. Apartment is Bare.. all shelves are empty.. The Smell is so distinctive. you will always remember.. The Feelings you had.. when u once had a grasp on life.. Now you are no longer in control.. this is out of your hands.. You Let yourself slip away.. bodies dwindled to emptiness.. Theres Nothing left to do... but to give up all hope.. your opportunities have evaporated... so dont look back.. The Smell is so distinctive.. you will always remember.. Your Drug Addiction...
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12-31-04, 01:14 PM
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.::Outside The Circle::.
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IP: CC3D AFAC
motherfucks.. im done writing god damn poetry.. cant even get any feed on shit...
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12-31-04, 05:03 PM
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IP: E03C 959C
no flow well it is poetry all poetry dosent need it
the vocab was good --- and i liekd it jsut to short keep writin poettry tho even if you dont get much feed --its for yourself |
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01-01-05, 12:24 AM
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'Member Those Golden Days
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IP: 6EB5 74FF
Pretty good, it's hard to write good poetry without rhyming. I liked it, just keep elevating is all I can really say. px
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01-01-05, 01:40 AM
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.::Outside The Circle::.
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IP: CC3D AFAC
thanks for the honest feed peeps.. uppin...
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01-03-05, 03:28 PM
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Rastafari Walk Tall
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IP: E81D BEA8
-thought it was dope how u made it like s/he could smelllt the addiction
-unlike sum, i dnt think poetry ever has 2 rhyme, in fact if it doesn't it seems more real and less manufactured if u get me -nice level of vocab 4 theme -keep em coming man -dnt worry if Intellectual thoughts is gd 4 anythin its 4 gettin fbak on poems n shit P.S :::thanks 4 closin that mofo.........lol
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01-03-05, 06:30 PM
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<<-Carpe Noctum->>
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IP: 3240 794D
This is a very nice poem,your words were very descriptive to how recovery is..lol..i wished it was longer, but this is a great poem, you left me wanting more...keep droppin,i usually get around to reading pieces when i have time....1
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