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03-09-05, 08:30 AM | #1 | ||||||
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Being real
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Being real
Drastic with all schemes like basketball teams Adrift and swift with lay ups play corrupt with steams I’m hood creature but like a good teacher assign homework Rhymes make domes perk blind a preacher unknown jerks Kneel, in rap a Detroit designer is an adroit climber on Music charts, this is the Ghetto here I let go of my spear strong Rub on war paint wearing FUBU survive in a ZULU tribe My true crew does strive for success we don’t believe in that dodo jive About we can’t make it, from the bottom rose up fast exposed To gas and gunshots no fun spots in the hood case closed Get grave results when one behave as an adult no on can doze Rock boats like storms and rains then drop quotes to calm brains This guy is like a dye discolors and twists brothers that’s lame Some computers have a crack mousse but I have a packed house When speaking blend peeking like mountaintops got a wet spouse Like fountains hot without refrigeration for my clout’s a big situation It spoils bacteria crawling, disease diphtheria, MC;s are inferior just devastation The results shook like adult books with naked pictures in relation To Matrix scriptures, step silly and accept responsibility like grown folks Thrown quotes to communities of opportunities in a car with chrome spokes And a drop top with a plot that’s hot |
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03-09-05, 08:34 AM | #2 | ||||||
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http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=180733 READ THIS THREAD
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03-09-05, 08:37 AM | #3 | ||||||
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http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=180929 REAd this thread also
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03-09-05, 01:26 PM | #4 | |||||
in your system
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word, not bad man, alot of the rhymes seemed forced, and some lines were stretched, so basically all you gotta do is tune up on your structure and flow, but that was pretty tight, had nice complexity, wasnt boring, oh, and your wordplay and vocab can upped a little too, but not bad, it was pretty good
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03-09-05, 03:44 PM | #5 | |||
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Pretty good dawg jus work on ur structure and ur flow.....da rhymes was there it was a good verse i was feelin it but u jus need a little elevation and u will be dope.....7/10.....Pz Return da favor.....my OM is called Hard Times Feat. Buck.Shot
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03-09-05, 03:47 PM | #6 | ||||||||
Geaux Fuck Yourself
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6/10... seems abit forced at times... but other than that... it's good...
Return the favor on my open mic "you Don't Know Me" Thanks... & good drop.
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03-10-05, 01:47 PM | #7 | ||||||
Middle Weight
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Thanks For The Props On This One Yall For Real
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03-10-05, 02:31 PM | #8 | ||||
Banned: Cheating
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yeah i argee wit everybody else it seems forced & ur structure was off also but othawise u did pretty good vocab was basic but hey keep it up & u'll elevate wit time make sure 2 return the favor in my open mic: Dat Real Shit
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03-10-05, 03:24 PM | #9 | ||||
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not a bad piece here good flow....structre was a lil off...rhymes were cool up ya vocab a lil bit man no hate keep doin ya thing yall get there good shit so far
please return the favor in my open mic "bitterphobia" link in my sig
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03-10-05, 11:44 PM | #10 | ||||||
Middle Weight
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Thanks For The Love On This One Yall For Real
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