im just chillin here sippin on lean//
keep my money tight-cuz im -Grippin-ma-Green//
its just a hobbie-- like a fat boy eatin cake//
hittin up theze linez surely more than u can take//
readin my linez have u dazed outcha mind//
u need to buy a life ill spare ya a dime//
all in da game, cant maintain//
cuz im onda top people know my name//
(~*ghost*~) better recognize that one syllable werd//
spittin da illest linez that u never herd//
from lubbock texas hol it down twenty fo seven//
leave ya deceased completely no hell or no heaven//
in my back yard only da bonez remain//
over 100 different bodiez i done 4got all they namez//
just hadaz steppin up that i put down in a sec//
im dat one n only gangsta u just cant neglect//
blue is what i rep--- south is what i claim//
sniff da cane.smoke da jane,just do da damn thang,//
but holla ada playa for example ghost//
read theze linez n soon ya pupilz will be -toast-//
(DUECEZ) just a lil flow

( i want a battle! )

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eh pretty okay lines, kinda generic shit nothing unique about it...
if you trying to prove how tough you where, doesnt matter on the internet...
pretty basic rhyming, bars didnt flow to well, could work on that...

if you want a battle ill battle you

btw: if you dont post a link on a open mic you critique, you get in trouble, so fix that...

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post a link?whatcha mean?? n i need some work on my wordplay- n other bullshyt bull anywayz link?can any1 help me with that!but holla

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theres tons of places on this site to help you wicha rapping,,, im telling you this before the haters get in here
post a link, means you read SOMEONE ELSE'S open mic, leave your feedback, the address to that link is up top says something like "http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=190388"
copy and paste that link into your post

anyways, keep uppin

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