Lyrically she and I just seemed to hit it off
Verbally, we connected without the use of sound
Like speech without dialouge
Like phrases without sentences
we did our time together
like consecutive life sentences
Forgive my aprehension
The sista seemed to elevate my tension
left my soul in suspension
she was the personification of Black Pride
The parallel of an angel
As I spoke, she finished my sentences
I began her phrases
we dipped in and out
back and forth
side to side
as she yearned for my poetical pleasure
she let loose a scream
that of which the richter scale couldn't measure
I could tell she sensed my direction
plus I knew she felt this poetical erection
forgive my aggression
but she had me fully aroused
with her metaphors and similies
she awoke my poetic passion
she drowned me in her lyrical discharges
and I sipped them all up
straight out the bottle
no need for a cup
as she shivered
when I delivered
my poetic climax
I left her yearning for more
I knew she wanted
a poetic encore
Our words bounced up and down
without ever touching the ground
silently but steadily
we moved without sound
I grab her words
as she grasps for mine
as I penetrate her vocab
I send shivers down her spine
Poetically, we share our deepest and innermost thoughts
we lose all inhibitions
we speak candidly
about our values and traditions
she electrified my soul
I was the yin to her yang
we seized the oppotunity
to do our respective thang
she left me exhausted
I left her satisfied and content
much like a sinner in church
she was begging to repent
I prayed for the chance to rendevous once more
to obtain pleasure directly from the source
just for one more taste
of poetic intercourse.

pretty tight i like the concept....like poetry is my woman...its like a millenium me and my girlfriend...

yo thanks 4 da feedbacc ill hit u up too

this was pretty good.. ..on a sexual level it could've been better but i get tha way you worded it.. ..keep it up


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nice shit weird topic i like seeing people change things up keep it up it's definatly dope

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most definetly a different 'approach' to the subject..but executed very well....its like on two platforms....two levels in which you can realise this piece....the first one of pure 'poetism' and what not....the second...well....lets just say...its most probably a more personal thing...but it did hit very deep....


....gotta say though synickle...you got a way with capturing the essence of something, really getting the reader right into the piece...and the structure you use is usually very hard to execute, but you seem to pull it off all the time (well from all the pieces i read anyway..)...so anyway...keep them coming..

..respect....

yo thanx dunny ur stuff be hott too. sometymes blow me away but dats all gravy. yo keep droppin and ill hit u up. 100

Um..This piece was fuckin nice.
Appealed to me sooo much for some reason...The way you entertwined all the literary terms in with the sexual ones, it just sounded tight as hell to me. Youve mad skills Syn..im feelin ya..keep up with this..
peace.

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keep dropping