(yo hit me up and let me know how u like it cuz im makein it in 2 a song if i get good feed back the song is cuz im was feelin this gurl alot and and want to pull a llcool j on her u know love songs )


I found me a girl to make my life complete/
Some body that fine and got some pretty feet/
So I can cozy and huddle/
Lay down my jacket so you can walk over a puddle/
I’ll give u a rose pull out your chiar before we eat/
Kiss you on your cheek and say oo girl u so sweat/
Its de ja vu when ever im with you/
I could go forever telling you what I would do/
But yet u stay wit that dude who treat you like a fool/
You say we will be together when ever you find a reason to break up with ol dude\
But where you at your neither here or there\
I swear I cant find you anywhere\
Im sure you anit in my closet or under my rug
This love search is really makin me bug\
And you know who im talkin about girl make your self seen\
Take a chance wit me and you you’ll find out what I mean\
Look fantasy’s can run but they cant hide/
And when I get you im gonna pour all my love inside./

v2

I wanna kiss you hold you never scold you just love you suck on you neck, caress you and rub you
Grind moan and never be alone if you're not standing next to me/
you're on the phone
Can't you hear it in my voice/,
I need love bad I've got money but love's something I've never had /
I need your ruby red lips sweet face and all/
I love you more than a man who's 10 feet tall/
I'd watch the sunrise in your eyes/
we're so in love when we hug we become paralyzed/
Our bodies explode in ecstasy/
unreal you're as soft as a pillow/
or a teddy layin next to me/
and I'm as hard as steel It's like a dream land, I can't lie/
I never been there maybe this is an experience that me and you can share /
Clean and unsoiled yet sweaty and wet I swear to you this is something that I'll never forget /

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yea.... we use to be whyteshadow but now we dat empire
but not empire state bulidin but dat empire who say bulidin son!!!

yo dawg........aight, i see what your trying to say and all........but its to to choppy!!!

metaphores-6
multis-5
lyrics- 6.5 lol

overall-6

could've been better, i kind of feel that its coming from the heart, but your soul wasn't in it homie, keep elevating, and i hope to see big things from you

holla

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DaCument

it was OK. not the best but juss OK man, check ya structure and flow man. and this will b good on audio seriously...lol
u wanna battle?

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