as my basic instinct kicks in
im thinkin of each m.c.'s extinction
reachin for the pen, start teaching
dont blink as the ink sinks in
rips into paper, rape ya with percision
did you a favor, savor the moment
cant wait to flip each word's component
till the page gets too dizzy to hold it
idea's unfolded, for years ive known it
owned it, only chose to expose prose recently
vowels and consanents constantly speak to me
wisper in my ear, voice travels secretly
till it reaches my inner vacinity
brought to the epitome of thought
fought intimately with each awkward sort
my thinking goes against everything i was taught
writing is a sport, a game to be played well
only the best are given the ILL label
still, others can elevate and stay able
to reach each level waiting if their faithful
be greatful of knowledge cause life's a college
every lesson learned reflects in dollars
intellect enriches both paupers and scholars
exscape the leashes of corporate collars
walk with a strong spine to support the mind
back your words to keep your thoughts in line
this was just a mental process of mine
before i light a battle & get on with shine

I was feelin the vocab and flow. NOt tryin to hard with words yet still spittin well

your flow is wicked,....nice and solid


throughout you had good vocab.... keep it up....and if its been a while....then i say keep doin ya thing...1


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Feedback is appreciated. Peace

oh shit! that was tight man, no joke... started strong, finished strong, flow was definitely on point, vocab was strong... the word play was good...
Only problem I had with this is that I wanted to see more...
"only the best are given the ILL label
still, others can elevate and stay able
to reach each level waiting if their faithful" these lines stuck out for me man... true...
Peace

nice kid .........as always rich ....nice to see u aint fell off

What up Mic... How you been? Thanks for the Reply... Peace

damn pretty ill i was gonna do sumtin like this in a day or so

pretty nice flow didnt really see any amazin punchs but ya vocab and flow made up for that id give this peice a 8.5/10

mad original flow and shit keep droppin

Good Look. Peace

shouldnt have to up this... Reply

Oh shit...about time some1 aint come wack

good shit mr. Rich

u started nice.....but then at the end
u kinda forced alot of it....so i got bored
therefor u get a ....
a nice feedback from me....but work on it some more....remember theres always something WAY BETTER.....
good shit
keep it up

Peace......
1..............

WHOA!! RAW... actually gave some positive feedback. I might actually not hate on you now!!

BUT WAIT, HOW LONG WILL IT LAST???

man dat there wuz tight. but i felt u shoulda make it a lil longer. not many pieces have kept me interested to finish it but this wuz ill no doubt. keep yo thang homie. ONE

the shit is real phat i like it it was hot keep them rollin in